Writing Review 1

Writing Review 1

Revise with ARMS and Edit with CUPS

Revising

When we REVISE, we ADD, REMOVE, MOVE, or SUBSTITUTE words and sentences to make the writing better.

Multiple Choice

(1)One of the zoo goers favorite to view is the blankets in the chimp's enclosure.  (2)The keepers  use them to keep the chimps engaged and to encourage the expression of natural behaviors.  
I need a topic sentence for this paragraph.  Which sentence could come just before sentence 1 and help open this paragraph? 

• The chimps at the Houston Zoo enjoy many enrichment activities.
• Going to the zoo is a great way to spend the day.
• At the zoo there is a lot to do.
• There are many ways to encourage natural behaviors in animals at the zoo.

Multiple Choice

(1) During the summer of 2006, YouTube was one of the fastest growing sites on the web. (2) The website uploaded more than 65,000 new videos and had 100 million video views per day that July. (3) It was ranked one of the most popular websites.

Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 3?

• For example

• However

• Soon

• In conclusion

Multiple Choice

YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use, and it was popular by entertaining young people.

What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

• YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use and entertaining to young people.

• YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use, it was also entertaining to young people.

• Quickly popular because it was easy to use, YouTube was also entertaining to young people.

• Because YouTube quickly became popular, it was also entertaining to young people.

Multiple Choice

The following sentence pair should be combined to make a better sentence. Which is the best revision?

The bicycle tire is flat. The bicycle tire is on the bike.

• The bicycle tire is on the bike and the bicycle tire is flat.

• The flat bicycle tire is on the bike.

• On the bike, the bicycle tire there is flat.

• The tire on the bicycle is flat.

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST way to combine these sentences?

The chocolate icing is creamy. The vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy or the vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy, but the vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy, the vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy bu the vanilla icing is too stiff.

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to combine these sentences into a compound sentence?

These flowering plants are beautiful. Each requires special care.

• These flowering plants are beautiful, but each requires special care.

• These flowering plants are beautiful, so each requires special care.

• These flowering plants are beautiful, for each requires special care.

• These flowering plants are beautiful, or each requires special care.

Multiple Choice

My brother is my best friend. He is always willing to go the extra mile to help me. ______, the other day he helped me study until 1:00 AM.

• For example
• Additionally
• As a result
• Furthermore

Multiple Choice

A good homework space is well-lit, with paper and pencils. _________, it is quiet and distraction free.

• However

• In addition

• All in all

• Although

Multiple Choice

Most animals sleep like people do; they lie down. ____________ birds and horses sleep while standing up!

• For example

• Likewise

• However

• Where

Multiple Choice

_______ they tried hard, the students could not complete the project in time.

• Although

• Despite

• First

Editing

When we EDIT, we look for CAPITALIZATION, USAGE, PUNCTUATION, and SPELLING errors.

Multiple Choice

Sebastian, one of Ms. Owens' most humerous students, told a joke.

What change should be made to this sentence?

• change Ms. Owens' to ms. Owens'

• change humerous to humorous

• change told to telling

• no change

Multiple Choice

The playground were usually Ashleigh's favorite place, and she couldn't wait for recess time!

What change, if any, should be made to this sentence?

• change were to was

• delete the comma

• change look to looked

• no change

Multiple Choice

Meg noticed a blue jay chirping in a tree, a robin building a nest for its babies, and a littel squirrel eating an acorn.

What change should be made to this sentence?

• change chirping to cherping

• change tree to Tree

• change littel to little

• no change

Multiple Choice

"I love football, but I could get hurt if I'm not careful while running with the field," Oscar said.

What change should be made to this sentence?

• change but to so

• change with the field to across the field

• change running to ran

• no change

Multiple Choice

For many years in the United States, some people was not allowed to vote.

• people were
• people are
• people is
• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What change if any should be made to this sentence? 
If your good at math then you will love this new game. 

• Change new to knew
• Change then to than
• Change your to you're
• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What change if any should be made to this sentence? 
"We should probaly leave for the movie soon," said Bob. 

• Change the comma to a period
• Change said to Said
• Change probaly to probably
• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What change if any should be made to this sentence? 
Yesterday we build a fort at recess.  

• Chance recess to resess
• Change build to built
• Insert a comma after build 
• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What change if any should be made to this sentence?
"Can we go to the park later today? asked Todd. 

• Change the question mark to a period
• Changed asked to Asked
• Insert quotation marks after today
• Make no change