Story writing revision

Story writing revision

flow of story writing

• beginning (place / time / background)

• rising action (creating a problem)

• climax (solving the problem)

• ending (NO DREAM!)

use of dialogue

• "I love you," Jack said. (too boring)

• "I love you, Rose," Jack whispered, shivering in the icy water.

• Remember to use different verbs of speaking!

• e.g. hiss / grumble / groan / yell...

Multiple Choice

"Get lost, dude!" Jack ___.

• whispered

• asked

• cursed

• giggled

Multiple Choice

"I want a cup of tea, please __" Mary said.

• !

• .

• ?

• ,

Multiple Choice

"If I have enough time," Tom said sadly__ "I will help you, but the fact is that I don't!"

• .

• ,

• ;

• ?

opening - using your senses

• what did you see?

• what did you hear?

• was there any smell?

• was it cold / warm?

Open Ended

Use one sentence to describe the picture. You can talk about the picture from sight / smell / sound / feeling .

what do you see / hear / smell / feel?

I was in a forest. It was difficult to see because it was full of mist. The only sound I heard was flocks of crows flapping their wings. The air was full of grassy and damp smell that made me feel sick.

Multiple Select

What kinds of senses did you experience in the last paragraph?

• sight

• taste

• sound

• feeling

• smell

rising action (creating a problem)

I thought I was only a hundred metres away from my camp, where my parents were. But I couldn't find my way in the mist. In the dark, I could see something hiding behind the tree in front of me.

Poll

Which one is a better development

• a ghost jumped out and killed me and I woke up! It was a dream!

• a zombie came out and I smashed its head with a stone! But then more zombies came!

• A strange creature came out and talked to me, saying that I wasn't safe here and he helped me.

climax

"Harry," a voice whispered from behind the tree, "It's not safe for you to be here. Come on, get my hand and jump on my back."

He was a centaur, a man with horse's legs. As he said, a gust of wind blew wildly from everywhere. "They're here," he continued, "The spectres, they are here! Come quick!"

Open Ended

describe this creature in 30 words.

Climax (cont)

I grabbed his hand and leaped on his back. He started to run and it was so bumpy I nearly fell off from him.

I turned my head and saw a piece of white cloth floating behind us. Then suddenly, it drew a hand towards me. Its hand was dark and skeleton, with long fingers and sharp nails like a claw.

Poll

Which one is a better ending?

• The spectre caught me and I died.

• I fell from the centaur and woke up. It was a dream!

• The centaur saved me and warned me never to go into the woods again.

Ending

Just as the creature's claw was right at my throat, the centaur made a huge jump and at that moment, we were out of the mist and back to campsite.

"You are safe now, Harry. But remember, never go into the Forbidden Woods by yourself." The centaur said seriously. As he finished, he turned around and left.