Describing feelings on a word level and sentence level

Describing feelings on

a word level and sentence level

By TING FUNG LI

sentence b

​I felt super excited on the first day of my secondary school life.

Sentence A

Compare the following two sentences.

My heart beat super fast on the first day of my secondary school life.

Poll

Which of the two sentences is more interesting and vivid

(able to catch readers' attention)?

• Sentence A

• Sentence B

• give readers room for imagination

• ​allow readers to form pictures in their minds

• visualize the descriptions​

The key of writing descriptions

Visualize? Visualization?

To ​make it simple, visualization is to show what happens, instead of telling what happens.

Multiple Select

Which of the following is/are 'showing, instead of telling' the feeling of the emoji?

• My mouth and eyes open wide.

• I can't utter any word.

• I am extremely shocked.

• I cover my ears just because I can't believe what's happening.

• describing actions

• describing the surroundings​

The key of writing visualized descriptions

sentence b

I am nervous on the stage when there are so many people.

Sentence A

#1 describing actions

My palm is sweating when I am on the stage looking at so many people.

Multiple Choice

Which of the following is 'describing the action' of feeling happy?

• I need buckets to hold all my tears.

• I can't help laughing so loud.

• I have to close my eyes, not seeing anything around me.

• I dare to turn around to check what's behind me.

sentence b

The house​ has left empty for long and that's why it was so dirty.

Sentence A

#2 describing the surroundings

T​he house has left empty for long and every piece of furniture is covered in dust.

Open Ended

Try to describe 'the classroom is very quiet'.