ELABORATION

ELABORATION

Adding Details to Writing

IMAGERY

Words and details that represent the five senses (sight, sound, smell, touch, taste)

Examples

ORIGINAL: The night was dark.

IMAGERY: The night was black as ever, but bright stars sparkled, lighting up the sky.

ORIGINAL: Jane played the piano.

IMAGERY: Silence was broken by the loud clang of piano keys as Shannon began
practicing.

ORIGINAL: The cookies are delicious.

IMAGERY: The sweet, chocolatey cookies melted in my mouth.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has better imagery?

• The room is dirty.

• There were papers stacked on the desk and dirty clothes piled on the bed.

Multiple Choice

Which sense does the example appeal to:

A gust of cold air blew over her, causing her body to shiver. After she pulled the fuzzy blanket up to her chin, she was warm and cozy.

• sight

• touch

• smell

• taste

Dialogue

Words that the characters say:

ORIGINAL: My mother was angry and yelled at me.

DIALOGUE: “Come here now!!” my mother growled.

ORIGINAL: My teacher said she was proud of me.

DIALOGUE: “Wow,” Mrs. Barreiros beamed, “you’re story was so interesting!
Great work!”

Multiple Choice

What does the dialogue show?

"You look so beautiful! I am a lucky man", Mark said to Marie, as he gave her a kiss.

• Mark hates Marie.

• Marie is Mark's boss.

• Mark likes Marie.

REFLECTION:

Details that show your thoughts and feelings about something

ORIGINAL: The team began to accept me.

REFLECTION: The team began to accept me. I felt more confident because I
finally had friends who included me.

ORIGINAL: The class did not talk to me.

REFLECTION: Being ignored made me feel alone and frustrated. I often cried
after school and wondered why no one liked me.

Multiple Choice

Reflection shows your:

• thoughts and feelings

• reactions

• appearance

Open Ended

Use imagery, dialogue, and/or reflection to elaborate this sentence:

I received an "A" on my quiz.