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Grade 4 Read/Write

Teacher Facing
November 20, 2024

Unit 3: American Revolution: The Road to
Independence

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Materials

Student

Teacher

● Informational Writing Rubric

● George Washington text

● RACER-C template from all week

● Response Cards

● Slide Deck
●“RACER-C” anchor chart

●Extended Constructed Response Rubric -
Informational (B&W) (download as a
Microsoft Word document to view it
correctly)

●Extended Constructed Response Rubric -
Informational (Color) (download to your
computer)

●Extended Constructed Response Checklist
(download to your computer and use page
3 for Informational)

●RACER-C Strategy

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Do Now

1. Sebastian ran ahead, stopping at the fence that
surrounded the lion area. Past the fence, a deep valley
kept the lions and zoo visitors apart. On this hot summer
day, a lion rested in the shade while a lioness crouched to
lap the water flowing from a human-made stream.

Excerpt from “To View at the Zoo” used with permission from HMH © Houghton Mifflin Harcourt Publishing Company
Read the dictionary entry for the word lap.

Which definition most closely fits the way the word lap
is used in the text?

A.Definition 1

B.Definition 2

C.Definition 3

D.Definition 4

2. Sebastian and his mother were surprised to see it behaving
much like a housecat. Sebastian chuckled, “It reminds me of
our Lina. Just this morning, she was licking her paws and
washing her face like the tiger is doing. She was stretching
herself like the tiger, too. “Don’t you think so, Carlos?” His
brother muttered, “Hmm,” then buried himself in his notebook
again. Sebastian ached to scream, “Put that down and pay
attention to the animals!” He didn’t, though, since his mother
did not encourage quarreling.

Excerpt from “To View at the Zoo” used with permission from HMH © Houghton Mifflin Harcourt Publishing Company
Read the dictionary entry for the word bury.

Which definition most closely fits the way the word
bury is used in the text?

A.Definition 1

B.Definition 2

C.Definition 3

D.Definition 4

bury /ˈberē/ verb

1. to put or hide underground
2. to put in the sea
3. to move out of sight
4. to be involved in an activity and ignore surroundings

lap /lap/ verb

1. to lick up with the tongue
2. to accept something eagerly
3. to gently splash or slap against
4. to overtake a competitor in a race

Multiple Choice

Read the dictionary entry for the word lap.

Which definition most closely fits the way the word lap is used in the text?

The word lap is used as in ...

Lee la entrada del diccionario para la palabra vuelta.

¿Qué definición se ajusta más a la forma en que se usa la palabra vuelta en el texto?

• a

• b

• c

• d

Multiple Choice

Read the dictionary entry for the word bury.

Which definition most closely fits the way the word bury is used in the text?

The word bury is used as in ...

Lee la entrada del diccionario para la palabra enterrar.

¿Qué definición se ajusta mejor a la forma en que se usa la palabra enterrar en el texto?

• a

• b

• c

• d

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LO:

SWBAT compose informational texts and revise

drafts by adding and rearranging ideas for coherence and
clarity.

DOL: Given an informational text, students will correctly
compose informational texts and revise drafts by adding
and rearranging ideas for coherence and clarity in at least 4
of 5 questions.

Unit 3: American Revolution: The Road to Independence

Ⓡ ELA 4.11C revise drafts to improve sentence structure and word choice by adding, deleting, combining, and rearranging ideas for coherence and

clarity NOV20

Ⓡ 4.12B compose informational texts, including brief compositions that convey information about a topic, using a clear central idea and genre

characteristics and craft

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LO: SWBAT compose
informational texts and revise
drafts by adding and rearranging
ideas for coherence and clarity.

Unit 3: American Revolution: The Road to Independence

Ⓡ ELA 4.11C revise drafts to improve sentence structure and word choice by adding, deleting, combining, and rearranging ideas for coherence and

clarity NOV20

Ⓡ 4.12B compose informational texts, including brief compositions that convey information about a topic, using a clear central idea and genre

characteristics and craft NOV22 but the 20th

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body
(noun)

details
(noun)

part of the essay that
explains and develops

the central idea

Academic Vocabulary

central idea

(noun)

the main idea, or what

the essay is mostly

about.

ideas included by an

author that contributes to

his or her central idea

Match

Match the academic vocabulary with its definition.

Hacer coincidir el vocabulario académico con su definición.

• body

• details

• central idea

part of the essay that explains and deve

ideas included by an author that contrib

the main idea, or what the essay is most

• part of the essay that explains and deve

• ideas included by an author that contrib

• the main idea, or what the essay is most

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revise
(noun)

coherent

(noun)

a stage in the writing

process where changes
are made to improve the

writing

Academic Vocabulary

clarity
(noun)

the quality of being clear;

easy to see, hear, or

understand

logically ordered

Match

Match the correct vocabulary to its definition.

Hacer coincidir el vocabulario académico con su definición.

• revise

• coherent

• clarity

a stage in the writing process where cha

logically ordered

the quality of being clear; easy to see,

• a stage in the writing process where cha

• logically ordered

• the quality of being clear; easy to see,

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territory

(noun)

an area or region of

land

assembled

(verb)

to gather into a group

fellow
(verb)

partner; companion

Content Vocabulary

Match

Match the correct vocabulary to its definition.

Hacer coincidir el vocabulario con su definición.

• territory

• fellow

• assembled

an area or region of land

partner, companion

to gather into a group

• an area or region of land

• partner, companion

• to gather into a group

ECR Rubric!

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Real Life Connection: What
do you do at home to guide
you and keep you in check?

Unit 3: American Revolution: The Road to Independence

Ⓡ ELA 4.11C revise drafts to improve sentence structure and word choice by adding, deleting, combining, and rearranging ideas for coherence and

clarity NOV20

Ⓡ 4.12B compose informational texts, including brief compositions that convey information about a topic, using a clear central idea and genre

characteristics and craft

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Writing Process Review

Planning

Drafting

Revising

Editing
Publishi

ng

● Determine

topic,
purpose, and
genre,
audience.

● Brainstorm

and
map/organize
ideas.

● Write a rough

draft.

● Include…
○ central idea

(informational
or claim/
argumentative)

○ text evidence
○ conclusion

● Improve

organization,
development
of ideas, and
word choice.

○ add
○ delete
○ combine
○ rearrange

● Proofread

and correct
any
mistakes.

● Check…
○ spelling
○ capitalizatio

n

○ punctuation
○ grammar

● Write or type

the corrected
final copy.

● Share with

audience/
readers.

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Read the text “George Washington.” Based on the details in the
text, write a response to the following:

Explain why George Washington was a significant figure in the
American Revolution.

Write a well-organized informational essay that uses specific
evidence from the article to support your answer.

Topic: Explain why George Washington was a significant figure in
the American Revolution.

Purpose: Write a well-organized informational essay that uses
specific evidence from the article to support your answer.

Genre: Informational

Audience: Fourth Grade
students and teacher

Revising

● Improve

organization,
development
of ideas, and
word choice.

○ add
○ delete
○ combine
○ rearrange

Why do you think it is
important for writers
to add ideas to their
writing?

It is important
for writers to
add ideas to
their writings
to…

Revising: Adding ideas, phrases, or words

Expand

Ideas

Descriptive
Language

Transition

Words

what?

where?

when?

why?

how?

Adjectives

F. Language

Imagery

Addition

Cause-Effect

Contrast

Sequence

Summary

One Sunday, I couldn’t

go to my park, so I

explored my backyard

instead. Since it was wet, I

decided to splash in. While

I was playing, I found a

rock near to a tree and put

it in my pocket. Even

though I got soaked, I had

a time.

what?

where?

when?

why?

how?

Let’s think about the

following…

How can the writer
expand his ideas?

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

adding

adjectives

One Sunday, I couldn’t

go to my park, so I

explored my backyard

instead. Since it was wet, I

decided to splash in. While

I was playing, I found a

rock near to a tree and put

it in my pocket. Even

though I got soaked, I had

a time.

what?

where?

when?

why?

how?

Let’s think about the

following…

How can the writer
expand his ideas?

favorite

ᐱ

rainy

huge green

puddles

shiny

left

great

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ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

ᐱ

adding

adjectives

One rainy Sunday, I

couldn’t go to my favorite
park, so I explored my
backyard instead. Since it
was wet, I decided to
splash in puddles. While I
was playing, I found a shiny
rock near to a huge green
tree and put it in my left
pocket. Even though I got
soaked, I had a great time.

Does it sound better?

Adding

ideas, words,
and phrases
help writers
to improve

their

writings.

Revising: Rearranging ideas, phrases, or words

words

When writers

rearrange ideas
they change the

order of…

sentences

to maintain the
meaning of their

writing.

and

“Informational Text” Anchor Chart from HMH – used with permission © Houghton Mifflin Harcourt Publishing Company.

Why do you think is
important for writers
to rearrange ideas,
phrases, or words to

their writings?

It is important for
writers to
rearrange ideas/
phrases/words in
their writings
because…

Volunteering

A wonderful way to help others in your

community volunteering is. When you give

your time to help at places like animal

shelters, food banks, or libraries, you make

the world a better place. Is the best part
that helping others makes you feel happy

too!

Turn to PowerPoint

Are there ideas that should be rearranged in

the text?

Would rearranging this part
make my sentence clearer?

Would rearranging this part
make my sentence clearer?

Volunteering

Volunteering is wonderful way to help
others in your community. When you
give your time to help at places like

animal shelters, food banks, or libraries,
you make the world a better place. The
best part is that helping others makes

you feel happy too!

After rearranging information that was in the wrong order, is

the writer's message clearly conveyed?

My Proudest Race

(1) My heart pounded as I lined up at the starting line of the big
race. (2) I pushed off hard and pumped my arms just like I'd
practiced, when the whistle blew. (3) The other runners were
right beside me, but I focused straight ahead. (4) Burned my legs
as I sprinted toward the finish line. (5) When I finally crossed it, I
threw my arms up in victory! (6) Even though I came in third
place, I was proud of myself for trying my very best.

Zion wrote a paper about his track meet. Read his paper and look

for any revisions he should make.

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to revise sentence 2?

The best way to revise sentence 2 is ...

¿Cuál es la mejor manera de revisar la oración 2?

La mejor manera de revisar la oración 2 es ...

• a

• b

• c

• d

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to revise sentence 4?

The best way to revise sentence 4 is ...

• a

• b

• c

• d

Tamales

(1) Every December, my family gathers at Grandma's house to
make tamales together. (2) Fills with laughter as we spread masa
on corn husks and add filling. (3) Even my little brother helps,
though he usually makes a mess! (4) It's not just about the food -
it's about keeping our family's Mexican heritage alive and making
memories together.

Victoria wrote a special family tradition. Read her paper and look for

any revisions she should make.

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to revise sentence 2?

The best way to revise sentence 2 is ...

¿Cuál es la mejor manera de revisar la oración 2?

La mejor manera de revisar la oración 2 es ...

• a

• b

• c

• d

Multiple Choice

Sabrina wants to add this senten ce to her paragraph (sentences 1-4)

Where is the best place to add this sentence?

The` best place to add this sentence is ...

Sabrina quiere añadir este mensaje a su párrafo (frases 1 a 4)

¿Cuál es el mejor lugar para agregar esta oración?

El mejor lugar para agregar esta oración es ...

• a

• b

• c

• d

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“George Washington” Vocabulary

unanimously

u

nan

i

mous

ly

Definition: in complete agreement

Example: When the new U.S. Constitution was affirmed,
Washington was unanimously elected to be the first president.

What does the word

unanimously mean in this

sentence?

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Does your
draft meet

the

requirements

of the

checklist?

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Let’s Review!

What have I written

so far?

Are there any

revisions I can make?

George Washington was a significant figure in the American
Revolution because he was a military commander brave and he
never gave up fighting for America's freedom.

Washington showed his importance to the Revolution in two major
ways. To begin with, he was a brave commander. The text states,
"he took command of his ill-trained troops" and led them. This
explains that Washington was significant because he kept fighting
even when things looked hopeless.

Furthermore, Washington was clever in how he fought the British
army. This shows that Washington was important to the
Revolution because he found clever ways to defeat Britain's
powerful army.

In conclusion, George Washington's bravery as a commander and
his clever battle strategies helped America win its independence.
Through his courage and wisdom, Washington truly became a
hero.

(1) George Washington was a

significant figure in the American

Revolution because he was a

military commander brave and he

never gave up fighting for

America's freedom.

Revising

Could we revise this

introduction by

rearranging ideas to
improve the writing?

Would rearranging
this part make my
sentence clearer?

(1) George Washington was a

significant figure in the American

Revolution because he was a

brave military commander and he

never gave up fighting for

America's freedom.

Revising: Rearranging Ideas

Could we revise this

introduction by

rearranging ideas to
improve the writing?

It’s your Turn to Revise!

Improve your introduction by rearranging or adding ideas,
phrases, or words.

Revising

(2) Washington showed his importance to
the Revolution in two major ways. (3) To
begin with, he was a brave commander.
(4) The text states, "he took command of his
ill-trained troops" and led them. (5) This
explains that Washington was significant
because he kept fighting even when things
looked hopeless.

(6) Furthermore, Washington was clever in
how he fought the British army. (7) This
shows that Washington was important to
the Revolution because he found clever
ways to defeat Britain's powerful army

Could we revise the
body paragraph by

adding ideas to

improve the writing?

Multiple Choice

Where is the best place to add this sentence?

The best place to add this sentence is ...

¿Cuál es el mejor lugar para agregar esta oración?

El mejor lugar para agregar esta oración es ...

• a

• b

• c

• d

It’s your Turn to Revise!

Improve your introduction by rearranging or adding ideas, phrases,
or words.

Revising

(8) In conclusion, George
Washington's bravery as a
commander and his clever battle
strategies helped America win its
independence. (9) Through his
courage and wisdom, Washington
truly became a hero.

Could we revise
this conclusion by
adding ideas to

improve the

writing?

(8) In conclusion, George
Washington's bravery as a
commander and his clever
battle strategies helped
America win its
independence. (9) Through
his courage and wisdom,
Washington truly became
a hero.

What revision should be made to
sentence 9?

A. Through his courage and wisdom,

Washington truly became a hero of
the American Revolution.

B. Through his courage and wisdom,

Washington truly became a hero
and president.

C. Through his courage and wisdom,

Washington truly became a hero
and commander.

D. No revision is needed.

Multiple Choice

What revision should be made to sentence 9?

The revision should be ...

¿Qué revisión debería hacerse a la oración 9?

La revisión debe ser ...

• a

• b

• c

• d

It’s your Turn to Revise!

Improve your conclusion by rearranging or adding ideas, phrases, or
words.

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Publishing

● Write or type

the corrected
final copy.

● Share with

audience/
readers.

Read the text “George Washington.” Based on the details in the
text, write a response to the following:

Explain why George Washington was a significant figure in the
American Revolution.

Write a well-organized informational essay that uses specific
evidence from the article to support your answer.

Topic: Explain why George Washington was a significant figure in
the American Revolution.

Purpose: Write a well-organized informational essay that uses
specific evidence from the article to support your answer.

Genre: Informational

Audience: Fourth Grade
students and teacher

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Time to Publish the Draft!

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HOT Question: How would
you write your ECR if we
didn’t use the RACECE–R
strategy?

Unit 3: American Revolution: The Road to Independence

Ⓡ ELA 4.11C revise drafts to improve sentence structure and word choice by adding, deleting, combining, and rearranging ideas for coherence and

clarity NOV20

Ⓡ 4.12B compose informational texts, including brief compositions that convey information about a topic, using a clear central idea and genre

characteristics and craft

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DOL: Given an
informational text,
students will
correctly compose
informational texts
and revise drafts
by adding and
rearranging ideas
for coherence and
clarity in at least 4
of 5 questions.

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