Revising

Multiple Choice

Fundraisers, such as bake sales, could help our school purchase many different things.
What word best replaces "things" to be more clear?

• stuff

• items

• things

• materials

Multiple Choice

(23) Twenty-five minutes passed by. (24) Where was Susanna? (25) Feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, she was not coming.
How is sentence 25 best revised for clarity?

• Amy knew Susanna, who was feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, was not coming.

• Feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, Amy knew Susanna was going to miss the interview.

• As she was feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, Amy knew Susanna was not coming.

• 
  Amy knew Susanna was going to miss the interview, and because of that, she had a feeling of dread in the pit of her stomach.

Multiple Choice

He lived in Indiana and he also lived in Connecticut before returning back to Maine with his mother when he was eleven.
How is this sentence best revised to remove needlessly repeated information.

• He went back to Maine with his mother when he was eleven, but before that he lived in Connecticut and he lived in Indiana.

• 
  When he was eleven, he went back to Maine with his mother, but before he returned to Maine, he lived in Connecticut and Indiana

• 
  He lived in Indiana and Connecticut before returning to Maine with his mother when he was eleven.

• He returned to Maine when he was eleven; however, he lived in Connecticut and Indiana before he went back to Maine with his mother.

Multiple Choice

Rachel was very excited about her new bubble gum machine, but when she put it on the counter, it broke, and her mother had to buy another.

• No change

• the counter

• the bubble gum

• the machine

Multiple Choice

YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use, and it was popular by entertaining young people.

What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

• YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use and entertaining to young people.

• Quickly popular because it was easy to use, YouTube was also entertaining to young people.

• YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use, it was also entertaining to young people.

• 
  Because YouTube quickly became popular, it was also entertaining to young people.