Writing SOL Review Composing & Revising Questions Pt 1

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to revise the fragment?

• He used his knowledge of mathematics and European architecture to design his home.

• To design his home, using his knowledge of mathematics and European architecture.

• He, using his knowledge of mathematics and European architecture, to design his home.

• His knowledge of mathematics and European architecture used to design his home.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence is complete?

• A. Wondered about those massive statues surrounding the mountain.

• B. With several hours to spare before dinner time.

• C. Today's topic of discussion deserves further attention.

• D. Still waiting on the others to return from their adventures.

• E. Sheltering tourists from the sun, which seemed to grow larger.

Multiple Choice

Which revision is the best way to correct the error?

Pay attention to punctuation!

• During his life, Jefferson held many important political positions he was also a talented scientist and architect.

• B. During his life, Jefferson held many important political positions, but he was also a talented scientist and architect.

• C. During his life, Jefferson held many important political positions: he was also a talented scientist and architect.

• D. During his life, Jefferson held many important political positions but he was also a talented scientist and architect.

Multiple Choice

Which sentence should be revised because it is NOT a complete sentence?

• He was captivated by their swashbuckling heroes, evil villains, and damsels in distress.

• In 1972, Lucas, a graduate of the University of Southern California's film school, directed American Graffiti.

• His second feature film and his first box office success.

• They offered him $15,000 to develop a script.

​Sentence Variety and Smoothness

Given four choices, ask yourself:  Which one doesn’t trip up your tongue when you read it aloud?  That’s often the one you want.

Repetitious: The car wouldn’t start this morning. This morning was very cold.
Shorter and Better: The car wouldn’t start this morning because it was very cold.

Awkward: Mia enjoys reading books. That is the reason she spends so much time in the library.
Better: Mia enjoys reading books, which is why she spends so much time in the library.

Choppy: Jake finished his homework. He went outside to play.
Smoother: After finishing his homework, Jake went outside to play.

Multiple Choice

How are sentences 1 and 2 best combined?

• A special person in my life is Ben, my big brother.

• A special person in my life is Ben, he is my big brother.

• In my life a special person is my big brother, his name is Ben.

• My big brother Ben, he is a special person in my life.

Multiple Choice

How can sentences 15 and 16 best be combined without changing their meaning?

• Because Mrs. Grant also coached Hollow Creek's team, the team finished in second place.

• Mrs. Grant also coached Hollow Creek's team to a second-place finish.

• Mrs. Grant also coached Hollow Creek's team, so they finished in second place.

• Though Mrs. Grant also coached Hollow Creek's team, the team finished in second place.

Multiple Choice

How can Julius best combine these sentences without changing their meaning?

• Mrs. Simms knows many of the band parents, but she could ask some of them to help her prepare the feast.

• Since Mrs. Simms knows many of the band parents, she could ask some of them to help her prepare the feast.

• Mrs. Simms knows many of the band parents, or she could ask some of them to help her prepare the feast.

• Though Mrs. Simms knows many of the band parents, she could ask some of them to help her prepare the feast.

Parallel Structure: Keeping ideas in like form

Incorrect: She enjoys hiking, to swim, and riding her bike.
Correct: She enjoys hiking, swimming, and riding her bike.

Incorrect: The manager’s duties include overseeing projects, meeting with clients, and he writes reports.
Correct: The manager’s duties include overseeing projects, meeting with clients, and writing reports.

Incorrect: The students were excited about the field trip, learning new things, and to meet new people.
Correct: The students were excited about the field trip, learning new things, and meeting new people.

Multiple Choice

In sentence 30, how is to leave the trail and going exploring correctly written?

• leaving the trail and to go exploring

• leaving the trail and to go explore

• to leave the trail and go exploring

• as it is

Multiple Choice

In sentence 23, how is and to enhance correctly written?

• and enhancing

• to be enhancing

• to enhance

• as it is

Multiple Choice

How is as a way to compile and produce codes correctly written?

• as a way to be compiling and producing codes

• as a way of compiling and to produce codes

• as a way to compile and producing codes

• as it is

Multiple Choice

How is to disturb of be damaging to correctly written?

• to be disturbing or to damage

• to disturb or damaging

• to disturb or damage

• as it is

Multiple Choice

Which correction should be made to this sentence?

• insert a comma after reality

• Change performing to perform

• delete the comma after students

• change fiercely to fierce