LSAE Feb 6 - Bootcamp Day 1

English II STAAR Bootcamp
Revise and Editing

By Jada Bryan

Learning Objective (LO)

SWBAT revise and edit essay and publish written work for appropriate audiences

Criteria For Success

Step 1: Read and annotate for the main idea of the passage
Step 2. What is the goal of this passage? To inform, persuade, entertain, or explain?
Step 3: Check for structure and organization (Is the thesis clear? Is the passage logically ordered? Are the transitions smooth? Does the conclusion summarize the main points?
Step 4: Revise and Edit
- Focus on Clarity
- Improve Grammar, Spelling, and Punctuation
- Strengthen word choice and tone
- Cut redundancy and repetition

Fill in the Blank

What is the main topic for this passage?

Multiple Choice

The purpose of this passage is to what?

• inform or clarify a specific topic
• summarize a previous discussion
• persuade the audience
• entertain the reader

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to combine sentences 5 and 6 for clarity and effectiveness?

• In one country, marchers skip the music component altogether and participate in an intricate

  marching-like exhibition called precision walking.

• In one country, students participate in an intricate marching-like exhibition called precision

  walking, skipping the music component altogether.

• In one country, students participate in precision walking, an intricate marching-like exhibition

  that skips the music component altogether.

• In one country, students skip the music component altogether and participate in precision

  walking, an intricate marching-like exhibition.

Fill in the Blank

____________ could replace “bellow” in sentence 12 to better match the tone of the text?

Multiple Choice

J.T. would like to add the following sentence to the first paragraph (sentences 1–6).

Students from around the world are also part of musical marching groups.

Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 4

• After sentence 1

• After sentence 2

• After sentence 5

Step 4: Revise and Edit
- Focus on Clarity
- Improve Grammar, Spelling, and Punctuation
- Strengthen word choice and tone
- Cut redundancy and repetition

Step 1: Read and annotate for the main idea of the passage
Step 2. What is the goal of this passage? To inform, persuade, entertain, or explain?
Step 3: Check for structure and organization (Is the thesis clear? Is the passage logically ordered? Are the transitions smooth? Does the conclusion summarize the main points?

CFS

Read paragraphs 16-26

Multiple Choice

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 22?

• Change suzuki to Suzuki.

• Change said to Said.

• Change Suzuki to SUZUKI.

• Change rules to RULES.

Multiple Choice

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 26?

• Add a comma after NSSU.

• Change has now become to have now become.

• Change proud that the school’s to proud, that the school’s.

• Add a period after world.