Revise your Draft 7.2.1

Writing: Revise your Draft

Lesson 7.2.1

Lesson Overview

Learners can:

• review writing descriptions

• review elaborating on details

• revise the draft based on feedback using the ARMS checklist

You have learned that there are five types of words that can help you write vivid details. When you elaborate, it means that you tell more about something. Vivid details help you to elaborate and tell your reader more about something in your story.

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Elaborating Details

​What details can we add to this story?

Multiple Choice

Read the text.

Frances _____ out the door. She was late to catch the long, _____ bus that dropped off at the library. That morning, she had been _____ around the upstairs getting ready.

Select the best words to add details to the text.

• ran, grey, slow

• bolted, silver, a turtle

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  walked, old, a cheetah

• went, city, tired

Multiple Choice

Read the sentence.

Jana said, “My feet are too sore to go on!"

Choose the best substitute for the word “said" to elaborate on how Jana is feeling.

• called

• replied

• whined

• whispered

How to Revise

For today's writing activity, you are going to spend time revising your narrative writing draft.

To revise means that you will work to make changes to make your writing even better than it was when you submitted it before.

First, reread your narrative writing.

After you reread your draft, go through and apply the steps of the ARMS Checklist.

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ARMS Checklist

Gather your materials: pencil and Writing Activity Book, pages 102 and 103. 

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Open the Word Document, PowerPoint, or Bok Creator with your draft.

Your Turn!