Enhance Four Criteria in Writing Task 2

​Enhance Your 4 Criteria in Writing

By Hoang Khiem

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST PARAPHRASE for this topic

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Some people believe teenagers should focus on all subjects equally, whereas other people think that they should concentrate on only those subjects that they find interesting and they are best at.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

• Some people argue that teenagers should pay the same attention to every school subject, while others believe they should mainly study the subjects they like and are good at.

• The debate over whether teenagers should allocate equal attention to all academic subjects or solely focus on those they find intriguing and excel in is a contentious one.

• Teenagers have different opinions about studying. Some think all subjects are important. Others focus on what they like and what they are good at in school subjects.

• There is considerable debate over whether teenagers should give equal importance to every school subject or focus mainly on subjects they enjoy and that are most useful for their future careers.

Multiple Choice

What is the WORST PARAPHRASE for this topic

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More and more people today are spending large amounts of money on their complexions in order to look younger.

Why do people want to look younger?

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

• In recent times, an increasing number of individuals are investing heavily in skincare treatments and products to achieve a more youthful appearance.

• Nowadays, many individuals are willing to pay a great deal for beauty-related products and procedures in order to slow down the signs of ageing.

• It is becoming increasingly common for people to spend significant sums of money on improving their appearance in an attempt to appear younger.

• Spending large amounts of money on skincare and cosmetic products is necessary to maintain a youthful appearance for a lot of people.

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST STATEMENT for this topic

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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. 

What are the reasons for this? 

Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development?

• This essay will explore the reasons behind this decline and argue that, although there are some benefits, the negative consequences of this shift are more significant.

• This essay will examine the reasons and effects behind the decline in handwriting and discuss whether this trend should be viewed as a positive or negative development.

• In this essay, the causes will be discussed, and from my perspectively, this statement should be viewed as a positive or negative development.

• This essay will discuss the reasons for this change and explain why it is a positive development.

Multiple Choice

What is the WORST STATEMENT for this topic

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The best way for a country to prepare for the future is to invest resources in its young people.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

• I wholeheartedly agree with this point of view, and this essay will elaborate on my reasons.

• From my perspective, there are more superior methods beside allocating resources to the young people, to prepare for a future of a nation.

• Although investing in the young generation is a good way to prepare for a nation future, there are better ways to prepare for its future.

• This essay will present the reasons for supporting this view and consider how such investment can benefit a country in the future.

Open Ended

What is the PRIMARY ISSUE OF THIS INTRODUCTION (1 in 4 criteria), and explain the issue in detail

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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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>> Many individuals hold the belief that luck significantly contributes to the achievement of one's goals. In my opinion, I contend that hard work and patience are far more crucial factors determining whether individuals accomplish their objectives.

GIẢI THÍCH:
Câu Statement không hề nhắc đến yếu tố LUCK (vốn là keyword chính của bài).

Trường hợp muốn trình bày rằng có những yếu tố khác quan trọng hơn, người viết cần dùng cấu trúc "Although...., ......" để khẳng định yếu tố LUCK cũng có vai trò, nhưng vẫn có những vai trò khác quan trọng hơn.

Open Ended

VIẾT LẠI CÂU STATEMENT

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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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>> Many individuals hold the belief that luck significantly contributes to the achievement of one's goals. In my opinion, I contend that hard work and patience are far more crucial factors determining whether individuals accomplish their objectives.

THAM KHẢO
Although luck definitely plays an important role in one's success, there are more factors determining whether individuals accomplish their objectives.

Multiple Select

Đâu là câu SUB-IDEA TỆ NHẤT? (có thể chọn nhiều hơn 1 đáp án)

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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

• One significant aspect contributing to an increased quality of life in this century is one's financial stability and global economic integration.

• The first reason for this enhanced quality of life is the unprecedented progress in healthcare.

• Moreover, the digital revolution has fundamentally transformed our daily lives, marking a significant improvement over past centuries.

• The general population in this century also reap benefits from a finer education.

GIẢI THÍCH:
One significant aspect contributing to an increased quality of life in this century is one's financial stability and global economic integration

Sub-idea này không hẳn là sai hoàn toàn, như mắc phải 2 vấn đề khó giải quyết:
1. Về cohesion: "one significant aspect" chõi với 2 notions được đưa ra trong bài (one's financial stability - global economic integration)
2. Về triển khai, one's financial stability (tức personal financial stability, là 1 khái niệm vi mô) sẽ bị chõi với khái niệm global economic integration, vốn là một khái niệm vĩ mô --> rất khó để đưa ra supporting phù hợp với cả 2. Bản thân khái niệm "global economic integration" cũng đã rất khó support.

--> Tinh giản lại sub-idea

Open Ended

VIẾT LẠI CÂU SUB-IDEA VỪA RỒI ĐỂ KHÔNG CÒN LỖI

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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Multiple Select

Đâu là câu SUB-IDEA TỐT NHẤT? (có thể chọn nhiều hơn 1 đáp án)

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It costs a lot of money for a country to host an international sports event, such as the Olympic Games or football World Cup. Some people think that this is a waste of money, while others believe the opposite. 

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

• Firstly, there are various infrastructures that require allocating financial resources to build, maintain, and organise in such international events.

• Additionally, global-scale sports events often result in extensive clean-up work afterward, which requires a large amount of human labor cose.

• This is because the exorbitant costs associated with constructing state-of-the-art stadiums and upgrading infrastructure can place an immense strain on a nation's budget.

• The key rationale behind this thinking is that these events can significantly boost a nation's tourism industry, stimulate local economies, and create numerous job opportunities.

2 SUB-IDEAS LỖI:

- Firstly, there are various infrastructures that require allocating financial resources to build, maintain, and organise in such international events.
- Additionally, global-scale sports events often result in extensive clean-up work afterward, which requires a large amount of human labor cose.


GIẢI THÍCH:
2 câu này không đánh vào trọng tâm vấn đề ("waste of money" or not), mà giải thích các aspects cần phải chi tiền - giống với việc đưa ra causes hơn là chứng minh nó negative (waste of money) hay positive (not waste of money). Trường hợp discuss "waste of money", người viết cần chứng minh được nó phí tiền ở những khía cạnh nào và như thế nào, và ngược lại.
Tổng quan: "waste of money" khác với "requires a lot of money"

Open Ended

Viết lại 2 idea (1 idea cho mỗi bên) để không bị mắc lỗi trên và cũng không được trùng với các idea sẵn có

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It costs a lot of money for a country to host an international sports event, such as the Olympic Games or football World Cup. Some people think that this is a waste of money, while others believe the opposite. 

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Multiple Select

Đâu là câu SUPPORTING CÓ VẤN ĐỀ (có thể chọn nhiều hơn 1 đáp án)

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It is the responsibility of schools to teach children good behavior in addition to providing formal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Sub-idea (completely agree): Unlike parents, learning institutions have a unique opportunity to shape children's behaviour.

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Supporting:

(A) As a matter of fact, it is evident that children spend an excessive amount of time in school, where they are surrounded by their teachers and peers. (B) Owing to their great influence on students, schools should be entrusted with the duty of developing good behaviour since they are in charge of enforcing a school-wide code of conduct and punishment policy. (C) Given this responsibility, schools ought to devote sufficient resources and time, ensuring that behaviour training becomes an integral part of the curriculum. (D) To accomplish this, educators should regularly maintain the balance between formal education and extracurricular activities like athletics, music, art, and volunteer work.

• A

• B

• C

• D

GIẢI THÍCH
It is the responsibility of schools to teach children good behavior in addition to providing formal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? --> Trong trường hợp này, bất kể agree hay disagree, người viết cần GIẢI THÍCH LÝ DO (tức trả lời cho câu hỏi WHY) cho việc tại sao trường lại có trách nhiệm đó.

(A) As a matter of fact, it is evident that children spend an excessive amount of time in school, where they are surrounded by their teachers and peers. --> Câu supporting duy nhất trả lời cho câu hỏi WHY.
(B) Owing to their great influence on students, schools should be entrusted with the duty of developing good behaviour since they are in charge of enforcing a school-wide code of conduct and punishment policy. --> Câu supporting VẪN có trả lời cho câu hỏi WHY, tuy nhiên lại bị repeated opinion (schools should be....good behavior --> đã trình bày trong sub-idea rồi), và không thật sự có cohesion / coherence tốt với câu A phía trước đó.
(C) Given this responsibility, schools ought to devote sufficient resources and time, ensuring that behaviour training becomes an integral part of the curriculum. --> Đây là recommendations / trả lời cho câu hỏi HOW, chứ không phải WHY nữa.
(D) To accomplish this, educators should regularly maintain the balance between formal education and extracurricular activities like athletics, music, art, and volunteer work. --> Tương tự như câu C.

Open Ended

Bổ sung thêm 3 CÂU SUPPORTING SENTENCE B - C - D để không bị lặp lại lỗi trên

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It is the responsibility of schools to teach children good behavior in addition to providing formal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Sub-idea (completely agree): Unlike parents, learning institutions have a unique opportunity to shape children's behaviour.

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Supporting:

(A) As a matter of fact, it is evident that children spend an excessive amount of time in school, where they are surrounded by their teachers and peers. (B) ............ (C)............. (D)..................