Revising and Editing - 3 (7th)

What is the best way to revise this sentence:  A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag named Yao Ming.  

• A famous basketball player named Yao Ming carried the Chinese flag.
• The famous basketball player who carried the Chinese flag, he was named Yao Ming.
• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag he was named Yao Ming.
• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag.  Who was named Yao Ming. 

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence:
They don't usually let humans get very close to them and they travel in places too dense for wildlife photographers to go.  

• Insert a comma after them
• Delete and
• Change places too dense to places to dense
• No change should be made.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should be made in the following sentence:
One day, while watching some elephants at the campsite, Downer has an idea.  

• Change while watching to he was watching
• Delete the comma after campsite
• Change has to had
• Change idea to ideal

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.2.1D

CCSS.L.3.1D

CCSS.L.3.1E

CCSS.L.4.1B

What change should be made in the following sentence:
Other elephants carried smaller cameras that hooked right over the elephants tusks.  

• Insert a comma after cameras
• Change hooked to hooking
• Change elephants tusks to elephants' tusks
• No change is needed.  

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

What change should be made to the following sentence:
He wondered wheather the elephants would move steadily enough for the cameras to get clear shots. 

• Change wondered to wandered
• Change wheather to whether
• Change clear to clearer
• No change needs to be made

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CCSS.L.3.1A

What change needs to be made in the following sentence:
The images that the elephant cameras had captured were impressive, no human cinematographer could have captured such realistic footage.  

• Change were to was
• Change impressive to impresive
• Change the comma to a semicolon
• Change realistic to realism

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

What is the correct way to write the following sentence:
Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them.  

• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams.  Deer standing still and allowing the cameras to film them.
• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams, deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them. 
• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams.  While deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them.  
• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams while deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them.  

What change should be made to the following sentence:
"But now," he added, "It seems the most natural thing in the world."

• Change the comma after added to a period
• Change It to it
• Change world to World
• No change should be made in sentence 25. 

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CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.4.3B

CCSS.L.K.2B

Choose the best conjunction to combine this sentence pair.
We can ask directions. We can use a map.

• and
• but
• or
• because

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

The following sentence pair can be revised into one better sentence. Choose the sentence that is the best revision.
The bicycle tire is flat. The bicycle tire is on the bike.

• The bicycle tire is on the bike and the bicycle tire is flat.
• The flat bicycle tire is on the bike.
• On the bike, the bicycle tire there is flat.
• The bicycle tire on the bike is flat.