BM1 Revising

Which of the following could replace sentence 3 and better articulate the position Kayla is trying to take in this paper?

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What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 5?

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 Sentence 8 contains an indefinite reference that affects the clarity of the sentence. What is the best way to revise this sentence?

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Kayla wants to provide a stronger transition between the second paragraph (sentences 4–12) and the third paragraph (sentences 13–16). Which of the following  could best replace sentence 13 and accomplish this goal?

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Kayla wants to add a quotation that will help support the idea presented in sentence 16. Analyze the quotations below. Which of these would be the most effective to insert after sentence 16?

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What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21?

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Catherine would like to provide a more detailed thesis statement for her paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 3 and accomplish this goal?

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In sentence 5, awesome is not the most effective word to use. Which of the following could replace awesome in this sentence?

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What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

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There is a redundant sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 11–18). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

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