Revising and Editing II

What is the best way to revise this sentence:  A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag named Yao Ming.  

• A famous basketball player named Yao Ming carried the Chinese flag.
• The famous basketball player who carried the Chinese flag, he was named Yao Ming.
• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag he was named Yao Ming.
• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag.  Who was named Yao Ming. 

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CCSS.L.6.1D

CCSS.L.6.3A

CCSS.W.6.2D

CCSS.W.6.4

What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence:
They don't usually let humans get very close to them and they travel in places too dense for wildlife photographers to go.  

• Insert a comma after them
• Delete and
• Change places too dense to places to dense
• No change should be made.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should be made in the following sentence:
One day, while watching some elephants at the campsite, Downer has an idea.  

• Change while watching to he was watching
• Delete the comma after campsite
• Change has to had
• Change idea to ideal

What change should be made in the following sentence:
Other elephants carried smaller cameras that hooked right over the elephants tusks.  

• Insert a comma after cameras
• Change hooked to hooking
• Change elephants tusks to elephants' tusks
• No change is needed.  

What change should be made to the following sentence:
He wondered wheather the elephants would move steadily enough for the cameras to get clear shots. 

• Change wondered to wandered
• Change wheather to whether
• Change clear to clearer
• No change needs to be made

What change needs to be made in the following sentence:
The images that the elephant cameras had captured were impressive, no human cinematographer could have captured such realistic footage.  

• Change were to was
• Change impressive to impresive
• Change the comma to a semicolon
• Change realistic to realism

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CCSS.L.6.2A

What is the correct way to write the following sentence:
Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them.  

• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams.  Deer standing still and allowing the cameras to film them.
• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams, deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them. 
• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams.  While deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them.  
• Curious monkeys reached out for the tusk-cams while deer stood still and allowed the cameras to film them.  

What change should be made to the following sentence:

"But now," he added, "It seems the most natural thing in the world."

• Change the comma after added to a period

• Change It to it

• Change world to World

• No change should be made in sentence 25.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should be made to the following sentence:
"But now," he added, "It seems the most natural thing in the world."

• Change the comma after added to a period
• Change It to it
• Change world to World
• No change should be made in sentence 25. 

Choose the best conjunction to combine this sentence pair.
We can ask directions. We can use a map.

• and
• but
• or
• because