The Penguin Sweater

6) Aisha would like to offer a more effective thesis statement for her paper. Which of the following could replace sentences 3 and 4 and help accomplish this goal?

• F. There was a group in the area that would be called Knits for Nature. This particular group decided that it wanted to help the birds and made sweaters for them that would do this.

• G. A group of concerned conservationists in the area came together to help these birds. The group, which called itself Knits for Nature, began temporarily fitting the oil-soaked birds with handmade sweaters.

• H While many people wanted to help the little birds, Knits for Nature acted quickly. After learning about the plight of Australia’s fairy penguins, they knew that there was something they could contribute.

• J These birds desperately needed some help, or they might all die. A group known as Knits for Nature came to the rescue for the birds with their sweaters.

7) What is the most effective way to revise sentence 6?

• A. Each day the penguins that leave their burrows head out to sea for spending the day swimming and feeding.

• B Each day the penguins head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding, leaving their burrows.

• C Each day the penguins leave their burrows they head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.

• D Each day the penguins leave their burrows and head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.

8) What is the most effective way to combine sentences 9 and 10?

• F Some penguins would try to groom themselves because they swallowed the toxic oil and died.

• G Attempting to groom themselves were some penguins, who swallowed the toxic oil and died.

• H While attempting to groom themselves, some penguins swallowed the toxic oil and died.

• J Some penguins would try to groom themselves, they swallowed the toxic oil and died.

9) What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 17?

• A However

• B For example

• C Furthermore

• D As a result