7th Grade Revising and Editing

(1) I don’t remember exactly how it happened, but at some point my parents asked if I wanted to have a dog. (2) I, of course, said yes. (3) We couldn’t decide what kind of dog to get at first, but at last we found a great breed, the Shetland sheepdog. (4) We called a good breeder. (5) I was so excited about getting a dog! 

• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (1)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (2)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (4)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," after sentence (5)

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(1) I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him. (2) I don’t remember exactly how it happened, but at some point my parents asked if I wanted to have a dog. (3) I, of course, said yes. (4) We couldn’t decide what kind of dog to get at first, but at last we found a great breed, the Shetland sheepdog. (5) I was so excited about getting a dog! (6) We called a good breeder. 

• Move sentence (5), so it's after sentence (2)
• Move sentence (5), so it's after sentence (6)
• Move sentence (6), so it's before sentence (1)
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(1) Before I knew it, I was on my way to the breeder. (2) I went inside. (3) I saw dogs everywhere. (4) It was so hard to pick which one to get. (5) I saw one I liked. It was a small blue merle. (6) He looked perfect, so I asked if we could get him.

• Combine sentences (2) and (3) as "I went inside and saw dogs everywhere."
• Move sentence (2) in front of sentence (1)
• Combine sentences (1) and (2) as "Before I knew it, I was on my way to the breeders, so I went inside."
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(7) It turned out that he was too young to sell. (8) So I kept looking. (9) When I finally decided on one, we were all very happy. (10) My sister asked if she could have a cat. (11) It still took a few weeks until he was old enough to bring home. (12) It seemed to take forever until the day came, but it did.

• Move sentence (8) in front of sentence (1)
• Remove sentence (11)
• Remove sentence (10)
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(1) It was so good. (2) We were on our way to pick up our newest family member. (3) When we went to pick him up, we realized that we had everything except the most important thing, a name! 

• Change "good" to "cold" in sentence (1)
• Change "good" to "exciting" in sentence (1)
• Change "good" to "dark"
• Change "good" to "sad"

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(4) On our way home, we came up with what seemed like the perfect name: Indiana. (5) This name came from his head coloring, believe it or not. (6) His head was the same color as Indiana Jones’s hat. (7) Like all dog names, it was shortened to Indy and eventually shortened to Ind. 

• Move sentence (6) in front of sentence (5)
• Move sentence (6) after sentence (7)
• Move sentence (6) in front of sentence (1)
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(1) We loved Indy, yet it wasn’t all fun and games. (2) When he was young, we had to blockade parts of the house because they were too dangerous for him. 

• Add "We had to make major adjustments for him," after sentence (1)
• Add "We had to make major adjustments for him," before sentence (1)
• Add "We had to make major adjustments for him," after sentence (2)
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(4) Another reason we had to block things off was that Indy was not yet married. (5) We also had to move my cat’s food because Indy kept eating it. (6) Finally, we had to build him a kennel.

• Change "married" to "housebroken"
• Change "married" to "in college"
• Change "married" to "working"
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

(1) Yes, we had to make a lot of changes, but Indy has changed a lot since the day we got him. (2) He is no longer a puppy, and he is housebroken! (3) Now he’s pretty much everyone’s buddy. 

• Add "My mom is cooking chicken for dinner," after sentence (3)
• Add "Today, I bought Indy a new toy," after sentence (3)
• Add "We are so glad we found him." after sentence (3)
• Add "Indy once grabbed a steak off the table and ate it."

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

Which sentence uses commas correctly?

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges and bananas. 
• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and, bananas. 
• I went to the store, and bought apples oranges and bananas. 
• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and bananas. 

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CCSS.L.1.2C

CCSS.L.5.2A

CCSS.L.7.2A