Revise and Edit: Lauren's New Game

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness, so she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness because she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness, she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness, and she skips through the introduction, and she gets right to the action

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CCSS.RI.3.3

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Mitchell would like to add the following sentences to the second paragraph (sentences 6-12).

Feeling startled, she shakes her head and sits up straight.

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• At the beginning of the paragraph

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 8

• After sentence 9

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CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.3

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Mitchell wants to help readers move from the fourth paragraph (sentences 16-23) to the fifth paragraph (sentences 24-26). Which sentence or sentences should Mitchell insert at the beginning of the fifth paragraph, just before sentence 24?

• It's a rhinoceros! Oh, no!

• Uh-oh! Another animal is just around the corner.

• Then Lauren hears a stomp and a huff.

• The tiger is trapped and won't be going anywhere.

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CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

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The meaning of sentence 33 is unclear. It can be clarified by changing "it" to -

• her game

• her shoulder

• the voice

• the rhino

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CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

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