Revising

(1) I don’t remember exactly how it happened, but at some point my parents asked if I wanted to have a dog. (2) I, of course, said yes. (3) We couldn’t decide what kind of dog to get at first, but at last we found a great breed, the Shetland sheepdog. (4) We called a good breeder. (5) I was so excited about getting a dog! 

• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (1)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (2)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (4)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," after sentence (5)

(1) I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him. (2) I don’t remember exactly how it happened, but at some point my parents asked if I wanted to have a dog. (3) I, of course, said yes. (4) We couldn’t decide what kind of dog to get at first, but at last we found a great breed, the Shetland sheepdog. (5) I was so excited about getting a dog! (6) We called a good breeder. 

• Move sentence (5), so it's after sentence (2)
• Move sentence (5), so it's after sentence (6)
• Move sentence (6), so it's before sentence (1)
• Make no change

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RL.2.3

CCSS.RL.3.3

CCSS.RL.4.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

(1) Before I knew it, I was on my way to the breeder. (2) I went inside. (3) I saw dogs everywhere. (4) It was so hard to pick which one to get. (5) I saw one I liked. It was a small blue Merle. (6) He looked perfect, so I asked if we could get him.

• Combine sentences (2) and (3) as "I went inside and saw dogs everywhere."
• Move sentence (2) in front of sentence (1)
• Combine sentences (1) and (2) as "Before I knew it, I was on my way to the breeders, so I went inside."
• Make no change

(7) It turned out that he was too young to sell. (8) So I kept looking. (9) When I finally decided on one, we were all very happy. (10) My sister asked if she could have a cat. (11) It still took a few weeks until he was old enough to bring home. (12) It seemed to take forever until the day came, but it did.

• Move sentence (8) in front of sentence (1)
• Remove sentence (11)
• Remove sentence (10)
• Make no change

(1) It was so good. (2) We were on our way to pick up our newest family member. (3) When we went to pick him up, we realized that we had everything except the most important thing, a name! 

• Change "good" to "cold" in sentence (1)
• Change "good" to "exciting" in sentence (1)
• Change "good" to "dark"
• Change "good" to "sad"

(1) I don’t remember exactly how it happened, but at some point my parents asked if I wanted to have a dog. (2) I, of course, said yes. (3) We couldn’t decide what kind of dog to get at first, but at last we found a great breed, the Shetland sheepdog. (4) We called a good breeder. (5) I was so excited about getting a dog! 

• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (1)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (2)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," before sentence (4)
• Add "I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him," after sentence (5)

(1) I am going to tell you about my dog and how I got him. (2) I don’t remember exactly how it happened, but at some point my parents asked if I wanted to have a dog. (3) I, of course, said yes. (4) We couldn’t decide what kind of dog to get at first, but at last we found a great breed, the Shetland sheepdog. (5) I was so excited about getting a dog! (6) We called a good breeder. 

• Move sentence (5), so it's after sentence (2)
• Move sentence (5), so it's after sentence (6)
• Move sentence (6), so it's before sentence (1)
• Make no change

(1) Before I knew it, I was on my way to the breeder. (2) I went inside. (3) I saw dogs everywhere. (4) It was so hard to pick which one to get. (5) I saw one I liked. It was a small blue Merle. (6) He looked perfect, so I asked if we could get him.

• Combine sentences (2) and (3) as "I went inside and saw dogs everywhere."
• Move sentence (2) in front of sentence (1)
• Combine sentences (1) and (2) as "Before I knew it, I was on my way to the breeders, so I went inside."
• Make no change