Have I Made a Mistake? 2017 STAAR Revising

1.What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 4?

• A.Unfortunately, my hands aren't interested, they don't care what my braid is telling them to do.

• B.Unfortunately, my hands aren't interested in what my brain is telling my hands to do.

• C.Unfortunately, my hands and my brain aren't interested in what is it telling them to do.

• D.No revision is needed in sentence.

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CCSS.RI.1.3

CCSS.RI.1.5

CCSS.RI.2.3

CCSS.RI.2.5

CCSS.RI.K.3

2.What is the BEST way to revise sentence 8?

• F. A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream, and from the car behind me, it returns my focus to the world around me.

• G. A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around e, it came from the car behind me.

• H. A shrill scream from the car behind me snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me.

• J. A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream from the car behind me, returning my focus to the world around me.

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

3.What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 9?

• A. All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind, the thunder of the car's metallic wheels, and the piercing shrieks of my fellow passengers.

• B. All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind and the thunder of the car's metallic wheels, I can also hear my fellow passengers who have piercing shrieks.

• C. All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind and the thunder of the car's metallic wheels and my fellow passengers and their piercing shrieks.

• D. All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind next to the thunder of the car's metallic wheels beside my fellow passengers who have pircing shrieks.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

4.Isaiah would like to add some details to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which sentence could BEST follow and provide support for sentence 14?

• F. I'm thinking that the ride will be over soon.

• G. It comes out of the tunnel really fast and heads straight up into the air.

• H The light of a beautiful day is welcome but nearly blinding after the darkness of the tunnel.

• J. While I find adventure movies intriguing, this doesn't feel intriguing at all.

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

5.What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 19?

• A. For example

• B. To repeat

• C. On the other hand

• D. In fact

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

6.Isaiah's closing sentence is weak. Which of these sentences could replace sentence 20 and provide a more effective closing for this paper?

• F. I'm going to get right back in the line and ride the Viper again!

• G. There's no doubt in my mind as to what I will do now!

• H. Finally I'm going to do it again.

• J. In closing, riding the Viper was an amazing experience.