Revise and Edit February Review

(1) Young George Nissen was at the circus when an idea popped into his head. (2) George was a gymnast and had come to see the trapeze artists. (3) At the end of the act, the acrobats let go of the swing and dropped into a safety net. (4) It sent them bouncing high into the air. (5) Nissen thought it would be great for practicing gymnastics. (6) It looked like fun, too!

The meaning of sentence 5 is unclear. Sebastian can improve this sentence by changing it to —

• the swing

• the air

• the trapeze artist

• the net

Tags

CCSS.RI.2.3

CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

(7 ) George was not just a daydreamer. (8) At age 16, he put together a rectangular frame made of steel from a junkyard. (9) Then he stretched a piece of canvas over it. (10) He f ixed the canvas to the frame with strips cut from old rubber inner tubes. (11) He took his invention to a camp where he worked as a counselor. (12) The kids loved bouncing on it!

Sebastian wants to use a more accurate word than fixed in sentence 10. Which of the following could BEST replace this word

• touched

• fastened

• folded

• twisted

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.K.1B

(13) George saw an opportunity to make a living with his invention. (14) He and some friends took the bouncing rig on the road. (15) They performed at schools all over the country. (16) People saw how much fun they were having and wanted to buy their own bouncing rig. (17) That's when George decided to name his invention. (18) During his trip to Mexico, he heard the Spanish name for “springboard” – el trampolín. (19) George added an “e” to the end of the word, and the new name “trampoline” stuck. (20) Trampolines can cause serious injuries.

The third paragraph (sentences 13-20) is hard to follow because one of the sentences does not belong. Which sentence should Sebastian delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 20

• Sentence 18

• Sentence 16

• Sentence 13

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CCSS.RI.2.3

CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.2.5

(7) We picked Max up. (8) At the guide dog school early in the morning. (9) Max came with his own suitcase. (10) That was my first surprise. (11) It held a toy, some treats, and a special brush.

What is the correct way to write sentences 7 and 8?

• We picked Max up at the guide dog school early. In the morning.

• We picked Max up at the guide dog school early in the morning.

• We picked. Max up at the guide dog school early in the morning.

• Sentences 7 and 8 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

(16) My third surprise was that Max liked me after all. (17) That evening, I gave Landon a good night hug. (18) Then I patted Max’s head. (19) He licked my hand. (20) And wagged his tail.

What is the correct way to write sentences 19 and 20?

• He licked my hand and wagged his tail.

• He licked. My hand and wagged his tail.

• He licked my hand and wagged. His tail.

• Sentences 14 and 15 should not be changed.

Tags

CCSS.L.4.1F

(1) " Come here, Bella! " I called

How should sentence 1 be changed?

• Delete the quotation marks

• Change Come to come

• Delete the exclamation point after Bella

• Add a period after called

Tags

CCSS.L.3.2C

CCSS.L.4.2B

CCSS.L.5.2D

(5) “Bad dog! I scolded.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?

• Change Bad to badder

• Add a quotation mark after dog

• Delete the exclamation point after scolded

• Sentence 5 is written correctly.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.8.1C

CCSS.L.K.1D

(16) “I’m afraid I have bad news” said the vet.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 16?

• Change I’m to Im

• Change have to has

• Insert a comma after news

• Sentence 16 should not be changed.

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

(3) To prepare, Peary traveled to Greenland. (4) There he met Inuit tribes and studied their ways. (5) He watched them build igloos, use dog sleds, and hunt. (6) Texas has a lot of hunters. (7) Peary learned about living and traveling in the harsh climate.

The second paragraph (sentences 3-7) is hard to follow because one of the sentences does not belong. Which sentence should Vivian delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 6

• Sentence 7

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CCSS.RI.2.2

CCSS.RI.3.2

CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RL.3.2

CCSS.RL.4.2

(8) Peary did not reach the North Pole the first time he tried, in 1898. (9) He set out again in 1905, making it farther north than anyone else ever had. (10) Sadly, his dwindling supplies force him to return. (11) Explorers need to wear good boots.

The third paragraph (sentences 8-11) is hard to follow because one of the sentences does not belong. Which sentence should Vivian delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 10

• Sentence 11

Tags

CCSS.RI.2.2

CCSS.RI.3.2

CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RL.3.2

CCSS.RL.2.2