Writing SOL Review

(3) She told Uncle Hank and us to meet her for lunch before she left, and she seemed excited.

How is sentence 3 best revised for clarity?

• She seemed excited before she left for lunch and told Uncle Hank and us to meet her.

• She told Uncle Hank and us to meet her before she left for lunch and seemed excited.

• Before she left, she seemed excited when she told Uncle Hank and us to meet her for lunch.

• Telling Uncle Hank and us, she seemed excited to meet her before lunch when she left.

How is sentence 12 correctly punctuated with quotation marks?

Zack just smiled, so I said Sure, that would be great, though I was still thinking about the movie studios.

• Before Sure

• After great

• After thinking

• After studios

(14) As the door slid upward, and our eyes adjusted to the light, I was surprised.

Which revision of sentence 14 uses the most descriptive language?

• The door moaned as it gradually slid upward, and as our eyes adjusted to the dim, muted light, my jaw almost hit the floor.

• As the door slid open and upward slowly, and our eyes adjusted to the light, and then I was really very shocked by what I saw.

• As the door opened upward, and our eyes adjusted to the light, I was dumbfounded.

• The door slid upward as our eyes adjusted to the light, and I was amazed.

Which correction should be made to sentence 21?

(21) This one's head was on the floor and Bill walked right into its open mouth.

• Change one's to ones

• Insert a comma after floor

• Insert has before walked

• Change its to it's

Which word replaces detailed in sentence 33 to make the meaning most precise?

Following that, we toured the model shop where detailed miniature models of spaceships, submarines, and a medieval castle were standing in various stages of completion.

• specific

• intricate

• particular

• thorough

• exact

Read sentences 6 and 7. How are these sentences best combined without changing the meaning?

(6) One day a customer sent his serving of fried potatoes back to the chef. (7) The customer complained that the potatoes should have been sliced thinner.

• One day a customer sent his serving of fried potatoes back to the chef who complained that they could have been sliced thinner.

• One day a customer sent his serving of fried potatoes back to the chef until he complained that they should have been sliced thinner.

• One day a customer sent his serving of fried potatoes back to the chef, complaining that they should have been sliced thinner.

• One day a customer sent his serving of fried potatoes back to the chef, yet he complained that they should have been sliced thinner.

Which word best would best replace However in sentence 16?

(15) Although Crum intended to upset the man, he had given him exactly what he wanted. (16) However, the customer left the restaurant to tell everyone about the delicious, crunchy new food.

• Instead,

• Afterward,

• Meanwhile,

• For instance,

• Still,

Read sentence 26.

(26) An important advance in the potato chip industry came in 1926, when Laura Scudder developed the waxed paper bag at her potato chip factory in California.

Fran adds this statement to her report with the appropriate citation. Which sentence best paraphrases the information in this sentence without plagiarizing?

• In 1926, Laura Scudder made the waxed paper bag at a potato chip factory in California, which was an important advance in the potato chip business.

• Laura Scudder developed the waxed paper bag in 1926 at her potato chip factory in California, and it was a significant improvement in the potato chip industry.

• In the mid 1920s, a significant development occurred when Laura Scudder invented the wax-coated paper bag at her factory in California.

• Laura Scudder developed the waxed paper bag at her potato chip factory in California in 1926 which changed the potato chip industry.

Read sentence 32.

(32) Consequently, the bags kept the chips fresher so they could be shipped to customers far away.

Which correction should be made to this sentence?

• Change Consequently to Furthermore

• Change kept to were keeping

• Change fresher to fresh

• Change they to it

Read sentence 38.

(38) Although the potato chip began as an accident it is now one of America's most popular snack foods.

In this sentence, how is accident it is correctly written?

• accident it, is

• accident, it is

• accident it, is,

• As it is