Animal Sleep

Derek would like to replace sentence 3 with a sentence that better states the controlling idea of his paper. Which of these would be the BEST replacement for sentence 3?

• As a result, that means other animals can hurt them.

• As a result, many animals have to figure out a new way to fall asleep.

• As a result, many animals have sleep patterns that help keep them safe.

• As a result, animals don't climb in bed and pull up the covers like humans do.

Derek has included an extraneous sentence in the third paragraph (sentence 8-11). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 10

• Sentence 11

The meaning of sentence 13 is unclear. What change should Derek make to improve the clarity of this sentence?

• change migrate to journey

• Change every year to annually

• Change it to the long trip

• Change sleep to sleeping

Derek has not used the most effective transition in sentence 25. Which of the following could replace However in this sentence?

• As a matter of fact

• For example

• To conclude

• In contrast

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 26?

• What is certain, though, is that animals that do sleep have found some clever ways to do so, they are also unique.

• What is certain, though, is that animals have found some clever ways to sleep that are unique ways, too.

• What is certain, though, is that animals that do sleep have found some clever and unique ways to do so.

• No revision is needed in this sentence.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 6?

• One half of the animal's brain enters a sleep state, the other half of the brain stays alert.

• As one half of the animal's brain enters a sleep state, the other half stays alert.

• One half of the animal's brain enters a sleep state, or the other half of the animals brain stays alert.

• As one half of the animal's brain enters a sleep state, there is the other alert half of the animal's brain.