Coach Book #3 - Lesson 15

"(1) The 1928 Summer Olympic Games (held in Amsterdam) was important for female athletes. (2) It was the first time in all of Olympic history that women could compete in artistic gymnastics and athletic events. (3) American Elizabeth "Betty" Robinson won the gold in the 100-m dash, one of the five athletic (track and field) events in which women competed."

Which revision of sentence 2 best uses punctuation to emphasize the importance of the 1928 Summer Olympic Games?

• It was the first time; in all of Olympic history; that women could compete in artistic gymnastics and athletic events.

• It was the first time, in all of Olympic history, that women could compete in artistic gymnastics and athletic events.

• It was the first time (in all of Olympic history) that women could compete in artistic gymnastics and athletic events.

• It was the first time - in all of Olympic history - that women could compete in artistic gymnastics and athletic events.

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

"Oliver, a locally famous artist in Dobbsville, soon became Jenny's teacher and mentor, teaching her how to make stained glass art from glass."

Which is the best way to revise the sentence to remove repetitive language?

• Oliver soon became Jenny's mentor, teaching her how to make art from glass.

• Oliver, a locally famous artist, soon became Jenny's mentor, teaching her how to make stained glass art.

• Oliver, a famous artist in Dobbsville, soon became Jenny's teacher and mentor, teaching her how to make stained glass art

• Oliver, a locally famous artist in Dobbsville, soon beceame Jenny's mentor, teaching her how to make stained glass art.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

"The goals you set for yourself should be specific and realistic. If a goal is vague, you will be unable to determine when you have achieved it."

Which sentence could be added next to best maintain consistency in style?

• Likewise, a goal that is impractical will only lead to disappointment when you cannot achieve.

• Also, setting an idiotic goal will result in feelings of failure if you can't achieve it.

• I mean, wouldn't you feel foolish if your goal were so unrealistic that you couldn't possibly achieve it?

• Additionally, an impractical goal won't leave you feeling great when you fail.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.1

"(1) Stacy found the necklace in the top drawer while looking around in the attic. (2) With it in hand, she walked across the dusty floor to the window to get a better look at the beautiful necklace. (3) It had smooth, luminous pearls that gleamed and delicate-looking roses made of white gold. (4) Each flower had a tiny diamond in its center."

Which sentence is the most descriptive?

• Sentence 1

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

"(1) One of the most important roles of the United Nations (UN) is to promote world peace. (2) The UN has been instrumental in bringing an end to conflicts throughout the world since the 1990s. (3) Peace was sometimes achieved through UN mediation. (4) Other times, peace was achieved through third parties with UN support."

Which revision that combines sentences 3 and 4 into one sentence shows the logical relationship between the two sentences?

• Peace was sometimes achieved through third parties along with UN support and other times it was mediation by just the UN alone that brought peace.

• Sometime peace was achieved through UN mediation, while at other times third parties secured peace with UN support.

• Peace was achieved sometimes through UN mediation alone, and sometimes it was achieved by third parties with the support of the UN

• Peace, sometimes through UN mediation and sometimes through third parties supported by the UN, was achieved

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CCSS.RI.6.7

CCSS.RI.7.7

CCSS.RL.7.7

CCSS.RL.8.5

CCSS.RL.8.7

"(1) The ancient civilization reached the height of its -power around 600 to 800 CE. (2) Its empire spread all the way from Southern Mexico throughout most of Central America. (3) Maya cities with their stone pyramids and temples were the envy of the world. (4) Then the culture disappeared."

Which revision of sentence 3 best uses punctation to deemphasize thedetails about Maya cities

• Maya cities; with their stone pyramids and temples; were the envy of the world.

• Maya cities, with their stone pyramids and temples, were the envy of the world.

• Maya cities (with their stone pyramids and temples) were the envy of the world.

• Maya cities - with their stone pyramids and temples - were the envy of the world.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

"My family clips coupons and looks for sales. And the savings add up."

Which sentence could be added next to best maintain consistency in style?

• As a result of our savings, we were able to purchase a new vehicle.

• Last year, we saved enough to replace our old, battered car.

• Accordingly, these savings afforded us the opportunity to replace our run-down car

• Thus, we accumulated sufficient funds for a new car.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.7.1

CCSS.RL.6.1

CCSS.RL.8.1

"For her birthday, Staurt surprised his grandmother by baking her favorite dessert, apple pie, which she loved more than all other desserts, for her special day."

Which is the best way to revise the sentence to remove repetitive language?

• Stuart, wanting to surprise his grandmother on her special day, made her favorite dessert - apple pie.

• For her special day, Stuart surprised his grandmother with her favorite dessert.

• Stuart baked his grandmother an apple pie

• For her birthday, Stuart surprised his grandmother by baking her an apple pie - her favorite dessert.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

"(1) 'It's OK, Patel said, slowly approaching her cat, Scout. (2) The cat was pressed against the chain link fence, shaking and mewling piteously. (3) Her coat was filthy, looking darker than usual. (4) Fearing she would further scare the cat, Patel moved even more slowly"

Which sentence is the most descriptive?

• Sentence 1

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

"(1) The surrounding coastal environment will be affected if the destruction of coral reefs continues. (2) This destruction will also have a huge impact on the local economy. (3) Businesses in the area rely on the reefs. (4) Dive shops, hotels, restaurants, and tour companies all count on tourists to spend money."

Which revision that combines sentences 1 and 2 into one sentence best shows the logical relationship between the two sentences?

• Affected by the destruction of the coral reefs,both the coastal environment and the local economy will suffer.

• When coral reefs are destroyed, it can have a huge impact on the local economy, and also on the surrounding coastal environment.

• If the destruction of coral reefs continues, both the surrounding coastal environment and the local economy will be affected.

• The destruction of coral reefs will affect the surrounding coastal environment, and their destruction will also affect the local economy.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.8.2