Our School Needs a Citizenship Program

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 3?

• They write essays, take tests, and do homework while there are sports practices.

• They write essays, take tests, do homework, and attend sports practices.

• They write essays, take tests, and do homework, they also go to sports practices.

• Sentence 3 is written correctly

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Ari would like to revise sentence 7 so that it more clearly states the position he is taking in this paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 7 and BEST accomplish this goal?

• Our school should join other schools in implementing a citizenship program that will require service projects within the school.

• School can be a place where students are part of something bigger than just academics, classrooms, and lunchrooms.

• We as a school can offer programs that help kids do amazing things with their lives today and add to their futures.

• In this paper I'll tell you how we can set some new goals and encourage kids in our school to be more responsible.

Ari has left an important detail out of the second paragraph.

"At the end of the grading period, each student..."

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• Before sentence 8

• After sentence 8

• After sentence 9

• After sentence 10

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CCSS.RI.6.5

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Ari has included an extraneous sentence in the third paragraph. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 12

• Sentence 13

• Sentence 14

• Sentence 15

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Which of the following can replace sentence 16 and serve as a more effective topic sentence for the fourth paragraph?

• A citizenship program at our school would offer many benefits.

• This would be really cool at our school, too.

• Everyone knows that kids who volunteer feel better about themselves.

• Students can be involved in a variety of projects with their classmates.

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The meaning of sentence 20 can be clarified by changing them to

• businesses

• programs

• students

• schools

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Ari wants to close his paper with a call to action. Which of these sentences could be added after sentence 21 to accomplish this goal?

• In closing, students will be proud of what they've done to improve their school and community.

• A citizenship program is a valuable idea for helping people get things done that might not otherwise be done.

• Let's give students at our school an opportunity to experience that pride by beginning a citizenship program here.

• Clearly, the extra work is worth the effort for everyone who is involved in creating a citizenship program today.