EOC Revising 1

Tracy's paper needs stronger position statement. Which of the following could best replace sentence 5 and more effectively state the position Tracy is taking in this paper.

• In other words, the electric car is no what you should buy today, and that is my definitive opinion.

• Truthfully, electric cars have advantages that must be pondered before making a purchase.

• Therefore, the electric car is the wrong choice if you are currently in the market for a new car.

• However, buying an electric car is always an option when you are thinking about a new car.

Tracy has used an ineffective transition in sentence 10. Which word or phrase could best replace In the end in this sentence?

• Obviously

• In fact

• However

• Instead

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 15 and 16?

• Furthermore, the batteries in an electric car weaken over time, eventually allowing a person to travel even fewer miles between charges.

• Furthermore, the batteries in an electric car weaken over time, eventually they allow a person to travel even fewer miles between charges.

• Furthermore, the batteries in an electric car weaken over time, which means the batteries eventually allow a person to travel even fewer miles between charges.

• Furthermore, the batteries in an electric car weaken over time because they eventually allow a person to travel even fewer miles between charges.

Tracy would like to add the following detail to the fourth paragraph (Sentences 13-17).

"This makes traveling longer distances in an electric car quite inconvenient."

Where should this sentence be inserted?

• After sentence 13

• After sentence 14

• After sentence 17

• Tracy should not add this detail to the fourth paragraph.

Tracy has included a redundant sentence in the last paragraph (sentences 18-23). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 18

• Sentence 19

• Sentence 20

• Sentence 21