Revising

Derrick has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 10. Derrick should change As a result to-

• To conclude

• For example

• Instead

• In other words

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness, so she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness because she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness, she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can't wait to play Zoo Madness, and she skips through the introduction, and she gets right to the action.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.5.1E

The meaning of sentence 33 is unclear. It can be clarified by changing it to —

• her game

• her shoulder

• the voice

• the rhino

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CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.3

CCSS.RI.5.5

Claire's paper ends abruptly and leaves the reader wondering what happens next. Which sentence should Claire add to the end of the paper?

• He had made it down and had actually rappelled.

• "Where's my snack?" he asked the counselors.

• He didn't have a doubt about what he wanted to say.

• "Can I do it again?" he shouted with excitement.

Claire forget to include an important detail in the last paragraph (sentences 16-29).

With trembling legs he took his first step.

Reread the paragraph carefully, Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 19

• After sentence 20

• After sentence 21

• After sentence 26

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CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5