Revise & Edit

Which change should be made in sentence 5?

• Change are to is

• Change either to likewise

• Enclose or texting in parentheses

• Change announces to anounces

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 7?

• Change Age to age

• Change make to made

• Change that to because

• Make no change

What change should be made in sentence 13?

• Change vicinity to vacinity

• Change one-sided to one sided

• Change seeing a movie to the movie you saw

• Insert a comma after friend

What change, if any should be made in sentence 15?

• Change talk to talked

• Delete the comma after street

• Change restuarant to restaraunt

• Make no change

What change should be made in sentence 22?

• Change which to who

• Delete the comma after drivers

• Change their phones to his or her phone

• Change caused by drivers to drivers caused

Which change, if any, should be made in sentence 26?

• Change can to can't

• Change person to persons

• Replace the comma with a dash

• Make no change

Charlotte wants to end her first paragraph with a clearly stated claim. What is the most effective way for her to rewrite sentences 4 and 5?

• If we want to reduce our carbon footprint, we should either purchase energy-efficient appliances or assure our planet a long future.

• If only energy-efficient appliances are purchased, our carbon footprint will be reduced, and a butter future for our planet is assured.

• We all want our planet to have a long future, which is why we should purchase energy-efficient appliances and let our carbon footprint reduce.

• By purchasing only energy efficient appliances, we can go a long way towards reducing our carbon footprint and assuring a better future for our planet.

To better engage her readers and show contrast between ideas, what is the most effective way for Charlotte to revise sentence 6?

• Families think that they cannot make a difference, but this decision is wrong.

• You may not think that your family alone can make a difference, but your decisions do matter.

• Not thinking that one family can make a difference, you may not realize hat your decisions matter.

• Instead of thinking that families cannot make a difference, people could realize hat their decisions matter.

Which transition word or phrase should Charlotte add to the beginning of sentence 9 to connect it with the ideas in sentences 6-8?

• However

• In addition

• Consequently

• In conclusion

Charlotte wants to clarify her meaning in sentence 11. What is the most effective replacement for by saving energy money is saved?

• if you save energy, you save money

• to save money, save energy

• you have to save energy to save money

• when you save energy, it could save money