Revising/Editing

1. Which sentence is correct?

• But in 2005, Stevens found a way to make her work even more meaningful when she was asked to help a group of disabled veterans train their dogs to be service dogs.

• But in 2005, Stevens found a way to make her work even more meaningful, she was asked to help a group of disabled veterans train their dogs to be service dogs.

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CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.7.1B

CCSS.L.7.3A

Which sentence is correct?

• Once approved, an inmate begins working with professional service-dog trainers, learning how to teach skills and commands to puppies that will one day be service dogs.

• Once approved, an inmate begins working with professional service-dog trainers, who are learning how to teach skills and commands to puppies that will one day be service dogs.

Which sentence is correct?

• This can not only affect a student’s ability to concentrate in class and at work but decreased enthusiasm for other aspects of everyday life including spending time with friends and family.

• This can not only affect a student’s ability to concentrate in class and work but also decrease enthusiasm for other aspects of everyday life, including spending time with friends and family.

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CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.7.1B

CCSS.L.7.3A

Which sentence is correct?

• A consumer drops the entire package in the liquid, dissolving without changing the taste, texture, or smell of the food product.

• A consumer drops the entire package in the liquid, and the packaging dissolves without changing the taste, texture, or smell of the food product.

Which answer is correct?

• Now in her 80s, she says she’s in the best shape of her life, training five to six days a week and competing in the National Senior Games in track and field.

• Now in her 80s, she says she’s in the best shape of her life, although she trains five to six days a week and competes in the National Senior Games in track and field.

Which sentence is written correctly?

• Custer, Meiler, Bates, and other active seniors show us that life can have vibrancy, excitement, and is adventurous, no matter how old you are.

• Custer, Meiler, Bates, and other active seniors show us that life can have vibrancy, excitement, and adventure, no matter how old you are.

Which sentence is written correctly?

• Custer’s family, fully aware of this daring grandma’s penchant for adventure, arranged a tandem jump for her with a professional BASE jumper.

• Custer’s family arranged a tandem jump for her with a professional BASE jumper, fully aware of this daring grandma’s penchant for adventure.

Which sentence is written correctly?

• They were navigating huge piles of trash that had washed up on the shore.

• They were navigating trash, huge piles of it had washed up on the shore.

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CCSS.RF.5.3A

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

Which sentence is correct?

• Local women still collect the flip-flops and other rubber sandals that wash up on the shore.

• Local women still collect the flip-flops that wash up on the shore and other rubber sandals.