Stringy Sentences

We watch animals other than birds, and one Saturday, Uncle Raymond spotted a chipmunk, and another time, I noticed a doe and her fawn behind a tree, and we always see a lot of butterflies and moths.

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Which sentence is the correct revision of this stringy sentence:

Last time I saw baby robins in their nest, and there were four babies, and an adult bird was feeding them.

• Last time I saw baby robins in their nest, and there were four babies. An adult bird was feeding them.

• Last time, I saw baby robins in their nest. There were four babies; therefore, an adult bird was feeding them.

• Last time, I saw baby robins in their nest. There were four babies, and an adult bird was feeding them.

Which among the sentences is the correct revision of this stringy sentence:

After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house, and we look up each bird in a guide, and we show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house, and we look up each bird in a guide. Hence, we show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house. We look up each bird in a guide. We show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house. We look up each bird in a guide, and show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

She completed her literature review, but she still needs to work on her methods section, even though she finished her methods course last semester.

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Although he organized his sources by theme, he decided to arrange them chronologically, and he carefully followed the MEAL plan for organization, and so he got perfect score for his project.

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With pizza and soda at hand, they studied APA rules for many hours, and they decided that writing in APA made sense because it was clear, concise, and objective.

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After getting home from work, my brother and I went to the mall last night, while my sister stayed home and studied.

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Which revision is the most correct one?

I’m happy, even though I don’t make much money, and my kids are always complaining since we can’t afford to buy the newest toys.

• I’m happy, even though I don’t make much money; however, my kids are always complaining since we can’t afford to buy the newest toys.

• I’m happy, even though I don’t make much money, but my kids are always complaining. We can’t afford to buy the newest toys.

• I’m happy. Even though I don’t make much money, but my kids are always complaining since we can’t afford to buy the newest toys.

Which revision of the sentence below is the correct one?

This new laptop computer, and which I bought yesterday, has already crashed twice, and I have no idea why.

• This new laptop computer, which I bought yesterday, has already crashed twice. I have no idea why.

• This new laptop computer, which I bought yesterday. It has already crashed twice, since I have no idea why.

• This new laptop computer, which I bought yesterday, has already crashed twice; however, I have no idea why.

Robert, a friend I’ve known since high school, doesn’t eat meat.

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