Buying Local

The meaning of sentence 3 is not clear. Adam can help clarify what he is trying to say in this sentence by replacing the pronoun they with –

• the products

• shoppers

• these stores

• fruits and vegetables

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 7?

• Studies show that the average distance most food travels before it reaches your plate, it is a distance of 1,500 miles!

• Studies show this. That the average distance most food travels before it reaches your plate is 1,500 miles!

• Studies show that the average distance before it reaches your plate that most food travels is 1,500 miles!

• Studies show that the average distance most food travels before it reaches your plate is 1,500 miles! (Make no change.)

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

• Fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value because their nutrients come from the living plant.

• Because their nutrients come from the living plant, fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value.

• Fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value , however, their nutrients come from the living plant.

• Fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value so their nutrients come from the living plant

Adam wants to improve the transition from the third paragraph (sentences 11–18) to the fourth paragraph (sentences 19–23). How can Adam revise sentence 19 to provide a more effective transition?

• Food that is grown locally is just a more healthful choice.

• Finally, buying food from local farmers can benefit the environment.

• As distance declines, the amount of fuel needed also declines.

• The last reason to buy local is an important one.

Adam would like to add the following detail to the fourth paragraph (sentences 19–23): "Customers bring their own reusable bags to carry their fresh food home."

• After sentence 20

• After sentence 21

• After sentence 23

• Adam should not add this detail to the fourth paragraph

How can Adam revise sentence 25 to more clearly emphasize the thesis

of his paper?

• Yet for the local consumer, the farmers’ market has a host of advantages that make it difficult to ignore as a viable option.

• However, for environmentally conscious consumers who want the freshest, best-tasting, and most nutritious fruits and vegetables, the local farmers’ market is the better choice.

• Check today to see whether you have a farmers’ market in your area; you won’t regret it.

• On the other Hand, the farmers’ market is a good way to help yourself and your community.