Buying Local

The meaning of sentence 3 is not clear. Adam can help clarify what he is trying to say in this sentence by replacing the pronoun they with –

• the products

• shoppers

• these stores

• fruits and vegetables

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CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 7?

• Studies show that the average distance most food travels before it reaches your plate, it is a distance of 1,500 miles!

• Studies show this. That the average distance most food travels before it reaches your plate is 1,500 miles!

• Studies show that the average distance before it reaches your plate that most food travels is 1,500 miles!

• Studies show that the average distance most food travels before it reaches your plate is 1,500 miles! (Make no change.)

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CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

• Fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value because their nutrients come from the living plant.

• Because their nutrients come from the living plant, fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value.

• Fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value , however, their nutrients come from the living plant.

• Fruits and vegetables picked when they are ripe are at the peak of their nutritional value so their nutrients come from the living plant

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CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

Adam wants to improve the transition from the third paragraph (sentences 11–18) to the fourth paragraph (sentences 19–23). How can Adam revise sentence 19 to provide a more effective transition?

• Food that is grown locally is just a more healthful choice.

• Finally, buying food from local farmers can benefit the environment.

• As distance declines, the amount of fuel needed also declines.

• The last reason to buy local is an important one.

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CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Adam would like to add the following detail to the fourth paragraph (sentences 19–23): "Customers bring their own reusable bags to carry their fresh food home."

• After sentence 20

• After sentence 21

• After sentence 23

• Adam should not add this detail to the fourth paragraph

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CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.1

How can Adam revise sentence 25 to more clearly emphasize the thesis

of his paper?

• Yet for the local consumer, the farmers’ market has a host of advantages that make it difficult to ignore as a viable option.

• However, for environmentally conscious consumers who want the freshest, best-tasting, and most nutritious fruits and vegetables, the local farmers’ market is the better choice.

• Check today to see whether you have a farmers’ market in your area; you won’t regret it.

• On the other Hand, the farmers’ market is a good way to help yourself and your community.