Revising and Editing Using Appositives, Compound, Complex

Revise this sentence: He kicked the soccer ball into the goal a shot most didn't think he'd make.

• He kicked the soccer ball into the goal and a shot most didn't think he'd make.

• He kicked the soccer ball into the goal, a shot most didn't think he'd make.

Revise the following sentence: Although he could no longer see. Paul kept trying to score a goal.

• Although he could no longer see, Paul kept trying to score a goal.

• Although he could no longer see Paul kept trying to score a goal.

• Although he could no longer see and Paul kept trying to score a goal.

Revise the following sentence: After kicking the ball to several contenders Paul finally made a goal.

• After kicking the ball to several contenders, for Paul finally made a goal.

• After kicking the ball to several contenders, Paul finally made a goal.

• Paul finally made a goal, and after kicking the ball to several contenders.

Combine the following sentences correctly: He let his passion for soccer take over his desire to play goalie. The goaltender for the game is a goalie.

• He let his passion for soccer take over his desire to play goalie, the goaltender for the game.

• He let his passion for soccer take over his desire to play goalie, and the goaltender for the game.

• He let his passion for soccer take over his desire to play goalie because the goaltender for the game is a goalie.

Combine the following sentences correctly: Paul competed as a goalie at first. He went to play right fullback.

• Because Paul competed as a goalie at first, he went to play right fullback.

• After Paul competed as a goalie, he went to play right fullback.

Combine the following sentences correctly: Paul didn't mind playing right fullback. Which is a position that is known as a defensive spot.

• Paul didn't mind playing right fullback, which is a position that is known as a defensive spot.

• Paul didn't mind playing right fullback, and it is a position that is known as a defensive spot.

What is the most effective revision to be made in this sentence: Paul accomplished his goal he proved himself to the soccer team.

• Paul accomplished his goal, so he proved himself to the soccer team.

• Paul accomplished his goal, for he proved himself to the soccer team.

• Paul accomplished his goal, and he proved himself to the soccer team.

What change should be made in this sentence: Paul challenged himself at his new school Lake Windsor Middle School playing soccer.

• Uncapitalize Lake Windsor Middle School

• Place commas around Lake Windsor Middle School

• Put a comma after School

What is the most effective way to revise this sentence: Paul continues to challenge himself he signed up for the soccer team at his new school.

• Paul continues to challenge himself, which he signed up for the soccer team at his new school.

• Paul continues to challenge himself, nor he signed up for the soccer team at his new school.

• Paul continues to challenge himself, for he signed up for the soccer team at his new school.

What change if any should be made in the following sentence: Paul a gifted soccer player will try his best to be a part of the team at Tangerine Middle School.

• Place commas around a gifted soccer player.

• Uncapitalize Tangerine Middle School.

• Change team to teem.

• No change is needed.