Mock STAAR Revising & Editing Review

Tracy’s paper needs a stronger position statement. Which of the following could best replace sentence 5 and more effectively state the position Tracy is taking in this paper?

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Tracy has used an ineffective transition in sentence 10. Which word or phrase could best replace In the end in this sentence?

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What is the most effective way to combine sentences 15 and 16?

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Tracy would like to add the following detail to the fourth paragraph (sentences 13–17).

This makes traveling longer distances in an electric car quite inconvenient.

Where should this sentence be inserted?

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Tracy has included a redundant sentence in the last paragraph (sentences 18–23). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

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Fatima realizes she has offered a weak thesis in this paper. Which of the following could replace sentences 1 and 2 and provide a more effective thesis statement for Fatima’s paper?

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What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

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Which of these details could best follow and support sentence 22?

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The meaning of sentence 24 is unclear. The clarity of this sentence can be improved by changing They to —

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What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

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