Wordiness/Redundancy

He then wrote an enthusiastic article for Strand Magazine, being the place in which most of his Sherlock Holmes stories had first appeared, and later wrote a book on the subject titled The Book of the Fairies.

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• in which the magazine where

• in which

• being where

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

She worked for thirty years as a teacher and librarian in the field of education in Baltimore public schools.

Which of the following words or phrases from the preceding sentence is LEAST necessary and could be deleted?

• thirty

• and librarian

• in the field of education

• Baltimore public

Over many weeks, as time goes by, her collection slowly grows: clay bowls, cups, vases, and sculptures fill the studio.

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• with the passing of time

• gradually

• remove the underlined portion

I think maybe I might possibly have met them all.

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• perhaps I have

• I have possibly

• I have

Smith is so intelligent that she could speak consecutively for twelve hours straight without running out of material.

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• continuously nonstop

• perpetually

• remove the underlined portion

He was supposed to calculate annual graphs of yearly sets of sales data by the end of the week.

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• covering a year's worth

• of about twelve months

• remove the underlined portion

Lauren was spending so many hours at her job at the zoo that she had very little free time and time to herself.

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• she had very little free time to herself.

• she had very little free time.

• she had little time to herself that was free.

In the next two weeks of time in the future, Tarica will be receiving a check for the legal work she performed for her client.

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• in the next two weeks of time

• in the next two weeks

• Two weeks into the future

The teacher became increasingly frustrated with the rowdy student who acted in a wild, disorderly manner.

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• who acted wildly

• whom acted wildly

• remove the underlined portion

George, after thirty years of work in the automotive industry, was thoroughly overjoyed to retire and no longer go to his job.

Which change is needed?

• No change

• to retire.

• to no longer have to go to his job because he retired.

• remove the underlined portion