STAAR 2015 Revision and Editing Q's: 23-27

In sentence 5, Nick has not offered a strong controlling idea, or thesis statement. Which revision of sentence 5 creates the most effective thesis for this paper?

• More interesting, however, is why everything about the scraggly little dog was stubby.

• More interesting, however, is that Stubby was both unusual and popular during World War I.

• More interesting, however, is how this little dog earned the rank of U.S. Army sergeant and became a war hero.

• More interesting, however, is how Stubby was able to keep the name for so very long.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

• While training on a Connecticut field, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

• He was training on a Connecticut field because he found a stray dog that won his heart.

• Training on a Connecticut field, a stray dog that he found won Conroy’s heart.

• He was training on a Connecticut field, there, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

Sentence 25 lacks clarity. What is the most effective change to make to improve the clarity of this sentence?

• Change recognize to know

• Change the German language to it

• Change him to a German spy

• Change the man’s to his

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D

Nick would like to add a sentence to help with the transition between the fifth paragraph (sentences 21–28) and the sixth paragraph (sentences 29–32). Which sentence should Nick add to the beginning of the sixth paragraph, just before sentence 29?

• Although Stubby had been wounded, he was still a friendly, cheerful dog.

• Fortunately, the dog had earned a high rank during the war.

• It wasn’t long before Stubby was on the battlefields of Europe.

• After about 18 months, Sergeant Stubby and Conroy returned to the United States together

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CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Which idea could BEST follow and support sentence 34?

• He was the first dog to ever earn a rank in any branch of the U.S. armed forces.

• He became the mascot for the university’s football team, entertaining the crowd by pushing the ball around the field with his nose.

• During his war service, Stubby was reported to be sensitive to even a small trace of gas.

• Georgetown University, located in Washington, D.C., was founded in 1789 and is a private institution.

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CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2