Revising

What would be the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

(1) Trae wanted to eat some cookies. (2) He didn’t taste any that he liked. (3) He asked his grandmother to bake some.

• He didn’t taste any that he liked and he asked his grandmother to bake some.

• He didn’t taste any that he liked and he asked his grandmother to bake some.

• He didn’t taste any that he liked, so he asked his grandmother to bake some.

• He didn’t taste any that he liked, he asked his grandmother to bakes some.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.5.1E

Which transition is best to add to the beginning of sentence 15?

(11)When Maya made her first jar of slime, it didn’t turn out so well. (12) She said it looked and felt like snot. (13) She kept trying to improve it though, and pretty soon, everyone started to tell her how great her slime smelled, looked and felt. (14) She gave some away as gifts, and more and more people learned about them. (15) Maya was selling her slime as part of her new company, Maya's SLIME,

• However,

• Therefore,

• After all,

• Soon,

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

The author needs to add a topic sentence for the fourth paragraph (sentences 16–19). Which sentence should be added just before sentence 16 as the topic sentence for this paragraph?

(11)When Maya made her first jar of slime, it didn’t turn out so well. (12) She said it looked and felt like snot. (13) She kept trying to improve it though, and pretty soon, everyone started to tell her how great her slime smelled, looked and felt. (14) She gave some away as gifts, and more and more people learned about them. (15) Maya was selling her slime as part of her new company, Maya's SLIME.

(16)She started selling her slime on a shopping website. (17) Then some small stores in Texas and several other states began to sell her slime. (18) She appeared on the television show "PBS KID INVENTORS" which helps children with business ideas to grow their companies. (19) In 2020, the Texas State Museum even put some of Maya's SLIME on display.

• From there, Maya's SLIME became very popular.

• Eventually, Maya needed help with her business.

• Maya was excited about starting the company.

• Maya sold some SLIME to a few people.

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CCSS.W.4.2A

Which change can the author make to improve the clarity of sentence 31?

(30) Maya’s mother is very proud of her daughter. (31) She encourages them to do what they love. (32) “You don’t have to wait until you’re older,” she says. (33) “If you have a dream and you have a passion, we say go for it.” (34) Maya certainly did!

• Change them to young people

• Change what to things

• Change they to you

• No revision is needed in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D

The author would like to replace sentence 2 with a sentence that will improve the focus of his paper.

The author wrote a paper about his experience at Fidget Spinner KidsFest. Read the author’s paper and look for any revisions he needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

My Visit to Fidget Spinner KidsFest

(1) I think Fidget Spinners are the best toys ever. (2) I just had one of the best experiences of my life.

Which sentence should he use?

• Fidget Spinners are a great toy because playing with them teaches children important skills.

• Playing with Fidget Spinners is a hobby families can really enjoy together.

• I was surprised that I had never heard of the Fidget Spinners KidsFest.

• Last week I had a great day with my family and learned about one of my favorite toys at Fidget Spinner KidsFest.

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RL.2.3

CCSS.RL.3.3

CCSS.RL.4.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

The author has included an extraneous sentence in the second paragraph (sentences 3–8).

(3) Fidget Spinner KidsFest is a huge three-day event that travels to different cities across the nation. (4) Families have the chance to try fun activities and admire detailed models all created from Fidget Spinner prototypes. (5) Fidget Spinners were invented in 1996. (6) My family went to the Fidget Spinner KidsFest when it came to Austin. (7) I had no idea what to expect when my parents said we’d be going. (8) I have always liked Fidget Spinners, but I didn’t realize how awesome they could be.

Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 6

• Sentence 7

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CCSS.RI.4.1

CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RL.4.1

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 26?

(26)Visitors were able to create a Fidget Spinner model and add the Fidget Spinner model they built to any state on the map.

• Visitors were able to build a Fidget Spinner model and add it to any state on the map.

• Visitors were able to build a Fidget Spinner to any state on the map they could add what they built.

• Visitors were able to build a Fidget Spinner to any state on the map they could add what they built.

• Visitors were able to build a Fidget Spinnerl, then visitors could add the Fidget Spinner to any state on the map.

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CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.3

CCSS.RI.5.5

The author would like to add a sentence to bring his paper to a more effective conclusion. Which sentence should he add after sentence 37 to help achieve this goal?

(34) I was super tired by the end of the day, but I was thrilled that my family went to Fidget Spinner. (35) It was fun for our whole family. (36) I saw many awesome Fidget Spinners, and I got to create some myself. (37) I can’t wait for Fidget Spinner KidsFest to come back to Texas.

• The best part of the day was seeing the Fidget Spinners

• Next Saturday, my family and I are going to South Padre Island.

• There are many fun things to do in Texas.

• Until then, I plan to keep practicing my new Fidget Spinner skills.

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RL.2.3

CCSS.RL.3.3

CCSS.RL.4.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

What change should be made in sentence 3?

Leaves brush against your windows and the chirps of birds echo through your room.

• Change Leaves to Leafes

• Change brush to brushes

• Insert a comma after windows

• Change through to threw

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CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 5?

(5)Some people like them so much that we created special hats for guests.

• Change like to likes

• Change we to they

• Change created to creating

• No change needs to be made.

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CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5