Revising and Editing Sentences

Which is the best revision for:

After he walked all the way home he shut the door.

• After he walked, all the way, home he shut the door.

• After he walked all the way home, he shut the door.

• After, he walked all the way home, he shut the door.

Which is the best revision for:

Last Sunday evening classes were cancelled for dance.

• Last Sunday, evening classes were cancelled for dance.

• Last Sunday evening classes, were cancelled for dance.

• Last Sunday, evening classes were cancelled, for dance.

Which is the best revision for:

The candidate promised to lower taxes protect the environment and end unemployment.

• The candidate promised to lower taxes, protect the environment, and end unemployment.

• The candidate promised to lower taxes, protect the environment; and end unemployment.

• The candidate promised to lower taxes; protect the environment; and end unemployment.

Which is the best revision for:

Tuesday which happens to be my birthday is the only day I am available to meet.

• Tuesday, which happens to be my birthday is the only day I am available to meet.

• Tuesday, which happens to be my birthday; is the only day, I am available to meet.

• Tuesday, which happens to be my birthday, is the only day I am available to meet.

Which is the best revision for:

Having just returned from work Julie was not in the mood for an argument about the washing up.

• Having just returned from work, Julie was not in the mood for an argument about washing up.

• Having just returned from work, Julie was not in the mood, for an argument about the washing up.

• Having just returned from work; Julie was not in the mood for an argument about the washing up.

Which is the best revision for:

Yesterday was her brother's birthday so she took him out to dinner.

• Yesterday, was her brother's birthday, so she took him out to dinner.

• Yesterday was her brother's birthday, so she took him out to dinner.

• Yesterday was her brother's birthday; so she took him out to dinner.

Which is the best revision for:

For your entree you may choose vegetarian pasta beef chicken or salmon.

• For your entree you may choose vegetarian pasta, beef, chicken, or salmon.

• For you entree; you may choose vegetarian pasta, beef, chicken, or salmon.

• For your entree, you may choose vegetarian pasta, beef, chicken, or salmon.

Which is the best revision for:

Meanwhile the athletes trained on the weight equipment.

• Meanwhile the athletes trained, on the weight equipment.

• Meanwhile; the athletes trained on the weight equipment.

• Meanwhile, the athletes trained on the weight equipment.

Which is the best revision for:

After riding his bike around the neighborhood twice Rob was sweating profusely.

• After riding his bike, around the neighborhood twice, Rob was sweating profusely.

• After riding his bike around the neighborhood twice, Rob was sweating profusely.

• After riding his bike around the neighborhood twice; Rob was sweating profusely.

Which is the best revision for:

"We were having a lovely dinner" Michael prompted.

• "We were having a lovely dinner." Michael prompted.

• "We were having a lovely dinner," Michael prompted.

• "We were having a lovely dinner", Michael prompted.