Paragraph Structure (Real Work Submissions)

Writing Prompt: Does true friendship have boundaries? How far would you go to help a friend who was in trouble? Explain in 7-10 sentences.

Student's Response (see below):

True friendships does have boundaries like not dating their boyfriend or family member. If they are also your true friend then they would tell you everything. they would not go as far as trying to date them. If my friend was in trouble i would go as far as i can go. i will go to jail for my friend. i would die for her. i would also even lie to someone for her. i would hurt someone if my friend wanted to because i knew that my friend would do the same.

Did the student restate the question in the first sentence?

• Yes. The student did restate the question in the first sentence.

• No. The student did not restate the question in the first sentence.

Writing Prompt: Does true friendship have boundaries? How far would you go to help a friend who was in trouble? Explain in 7-10 sentences.

Student's Response (see below):

True friendships does have boundaries like not dating their boyfriend or family member. If they are also your true friend then they would tell you everything. they would not go as far as trying to date them. If my friend was in trouble i would go as far as i can go. i will go to jail for my friend. i would die for her. i would also even lie to someone for her. i would hurt someone if my friend wanted to because i knew that my friend would do the same.

Did the student respond with 7-10 sentences?

• Yes. The student did respond to the writing prompt in 7-10 sentences.

• No. The student did not respond to the writing prompt in 7-10 sentences.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.11-12.10

CCSS.RL.8.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

Writing Prompt: Does true friendship have boundaries? How far would you go to help a friend who was in trouble? Explain in 7-10 sentences.

Student's Response (see below):

True friendships does have boundaries like not dating their boyfriend or family member. If they are also your true friend then they would tell you everything. they would not go as far as trying to date them. If my friend was in trouble i would go as far as i can go. i will go to jail for my friend. i would die for her. i would also even lie to someone for her. i would hurt someone if my friend wanted to because i knew that my friend would do the same.

Does the student capitalize the pronoun “I?”

• Yes. The student capitalizes the pronoun "I."

• No. The student does not capitalize the pronoun "I."

Tags

CCSS.L.1.2A

CCSS.L.2.2A

CCSS.L.3.2A

CCSS.L.4.2A

CCSS.L.K.2A

Writing Prompt: Does true friendship have boundaries? How far would you go to help a friend who was in trouble? Explain in 7-10 sentences.

Student's Response (see below):

True friendships does have boundaries like not dating their boyfriend or family member. If they are also your true friend then they would tell you everything. they would not go as far as trying to date them. If my friend was in trouble i would go as far as i can go. i will go to jail for my friend. i would die for her. i would also even lie to someone for her. i would hurt someone if my friend wanted to because i knew that my friend would do the same.

How should sentence three be corrected?

• They would not go as far as trying to date them.

• they Would not go as far as trying to date them?

• They would not go as far as trying to dATE them!

Tags

CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.4.3B

CCSS.L.K.2B

Writing Prompt:

Former South African leader Nelson Mandela once said, "Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world." Explain what this quote means to you in a 7-10 sentence paragraph.

Student's Response (see below):

What the quote means to me is that the more educated people are often the more powerful people. Knowledge is something that is very important because without knowledge, there wouldn't be leaders to help guide society or any group of people. Without any leaders with any type of knowledge, society wouldn't be the way that it is today. Leaders like Martin Luther King Jr helped guide society to fully accept African-Americans as people.

Did the student respond to the prompt in 7-10 sentences?

• The student did not respond to the prompt in 7-10 sentences.

• The student did respond to the prompt in 7-10 sentences.

Writing Prompt:

Former South African leader Nelson Mandela once said, "Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world." Explain what this quote means to you in a 7-10 sentence paragraph.

Student's Response (see below):

What the quote means to me is that the more educated people are often the more powerful people. Knowledge is something that is very important because without knowledge, there wouldn't be leaders to help guide society or any group of people. Without any leaders with any type of knowledge, society wouldn't be the way that it is today. Leaders like Martin Luther King Jr helped guide society to fully accept African-Americans as people.

How can the last sentence of the student's response be corrected?

• Leaders like Martin Luther King, Jr. helped guide society to fully accept African-Americans as people.

• Leaders, like Martin Luter King Jr, helped guide society to fully accept African-Americans as people.

• Leaders. Like Martin Luther King, Jr. helped guide society to fully accept African-Americans as people.

Tags

CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.5.2

Writing prompt:

Former South African leader Nelson Mandela once said, "Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world." Explain what this quote means to you in a 7-10 sentence paragraph.

Student's response:

I believe this means that knowledge is power. With that power comes a great responsibly to use that power for something great in this world. when you use this power you must be careful with how you use it. Do it in a way that is unique comparing it to other people. Make your mark on this earth and make sure it feels like you. Make sure that it's something you want to be remembered by in this world. so that way you know that everything is going to be great.

How should the third sentence be corrected?

• When you used this power you must be careful with how you use it.

• When you use this power, you must be careful with how you use it.

• When you use this power. You must be careful with how you use it.

• When you use this power? You must be caureful! With how you use it.

Tags

CCSS.RL.2.6

CCSS.RL.8.3

Former South African leader Nelson Mandela once said, "Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world." Explain what this quote means to you in a 7-10 sentence paragraph.

Student's response:

I believe this means that knowledge is power. With that power comes a great responsibly to use that power for something great in this world. when you use this power you must be careful with how you use it. Do it in a way that is unique comparing it to other people. Make your mark on this earth and make sure it feels like you. Make sure that it's something you want to be remembered by in this world. so that way you know that everything is going to be great.

How should sentence four be corrected?

• So, that way, you know that everything is going to be great!

• so that way. you know. that everything is going to be great.

• So that way you know? That everything is going to be great.

Tags

CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.4.3B

CCSS.L.K.2B

Student's writing response:

The career i chose is a mechanic because i want to be able to fix on my own car later in life.but also i want to be able to help any one with their cars incase they need it.so basically i want to be a mechanic to help people in need of it. also i want to give back to the people who has helped me . a nother reason i want to become a mechanic is because i want to have a good income . and the reason i want to have a good income is because i need two be able two provide for my family in the future if i have a family. so i say this because i want to be their for my family when ever they need me. so this is why i want to be a mechanic. a nother reason i because of this i want to one day give my mo her dream car.

Place a check next to each sentence that contains at least one grammatical error.

• The career i chose is a mechanic because i want to be able to fix on my own car later in life.

• a nother reason i want to become a mechanic is because i want to have a good income .

• so i say this because i want to be their for my family when ever they need me. 

Tags

CCSS.RI.8.1

CCSS.RI.8.8

CCSS.RL.11-12.1

CCSS.RL.8.1

CCSS.RL.9-10.1

Student's writing response:

The career i chose is a mechanic because i want to be able to fix on my own car later in life.but also i want to be able to help any one with their cars incase they need it.so basically i want to be a mechanic to help people in need of it. also i want to give back to the people who has helped me . a nother reason i want to become a mechanic is because i want to have a good income . and the reason i want to have a good income is because i need two be able two provide for my family in the future if i have a family. so i say this because i want to be their for my family when ever they need me. so this is why i want to be a mechanic. a nother reason i because of this i want to one day give my mo her dream car.

Place a check next to the corrected version of sentence two.

• Also, I want to be able to help anyone with their cars, in case they need it.

• But also i want to be able to help any one with their cars incase they need it.

• I also want to be able to help anyone with their cars, in case they need it.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5