Editing & Revising- Fake News & Sports and Brain Injuries

Fake News

What is the best way to rewrite sentence 4?

• By calling reputable sources "fake" the government is encouraging citizens not to believe the news, and even if it is true and can be backed up by science and data.

• By calling reputable sources "fake," the government is encouraging citizens not to believe the news even if it is true, can be backed up by science and data.

• By calling reputable sources "fake," the government is encouraging citizens not to believe the news, even if it is true and can be backed up by science and data.

• By calling reputable sources "fake," the government is encouraging citizens to believe the news, even if it is true, and can be backed up by science and data.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.6.10

CCSS.RI.7.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

Fake News

Maggie has not used the most appropriate work in sentence 11. Which word best replaces exciting?

• extreme

• thrilling

• excessive

• severe

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CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.6.10

CCSS.RI.7.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

Fake News

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 13?

• Even if it isn't based on science or facts, everywhere people twist facts. They try to push along their own beliefs.

• People everywhere twist facts, even if it isn't based on science or facts, to push along their system or belief.

• People everywhere twist facts to push along their system or belief, even if it isn't based on science or facts.

• Sentence 13 should not be revised.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.6.10

CCSS.RI.7.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

Fake News

What change should be made to sentence 22?

• Change would to should

• Change research to researching

• Delete the comma after sources

• Change the question mark to a period.

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CCSS.L.4.1C

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

Fake News

How should sentence 25 be changed?

• Change have to has

• Delete the comma after true

• Insert a comma after sources

• Change inate to innate

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

Sports and Brain Injuries

What change should be made to sentence 1?

• Change affect to effect

• Insert a comma after injury

• Change can be to are

• No change is necessary

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Sports and Brain Injuries

Joseph is not satisfied with his thesis statement in sentences 5-6. Which of the following should replace the sentences to provide a more effective theses statement?

• No matter how unique head injuries are, they are still dangerous, and athletes need to be cautious when playing.

• Playing sports can be a dangerous and potentially life-threatening activity that athletes need to consider when deciding to play.

• Is playing contact sports worth the possible consequences that may come if injured while playing, especially, if you’re not planning to play your whole life?

• Since it is not uncommon to get a concussion while playing sports, I begin to wonder if the potential enjoyment or benefit of sports is worth the risk of a head injury that could have lasting effects on your life.

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CCSS.W.9-10.1

CCSS.W.9-10.1A

CCSS.W.9-10.1B

CCSS.W.9-10.4

Sports and Brain Injuries

What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 10?

• At the end of the day

• When you come right down to it

• In summary

• For this purpose

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Sports and Brain Injuries

How can Joseph improve the clarity of sentence 15?

• Change serious to very bad

• Change pursuing to chasing

• Change their to the athlete’s

• Change they to these athletes

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5