Revising and Editing Quiz

J LO Barbie

(1)If you are a fan of Jennifer Lopez you must have the latest doll from a popular toy manufacturing company. (2) Mattel Inc. has designed two contemporary Jennifer Lopez Barbie dolls. (3) The first barbie is a replica of Jennifer’s style from her Dance Again World Tour. (4) Barbie is dressed in a sequin covered full-length bodysuit. (5) The second Barbie figurine is a alluring red carpet doll that imitates Jennifer’s gorgeous gown at the 2012 Academy Awards. (6) Each of these fabulous dolls is available at BarbieCollector.com for $29.95. (7) "I wanted to live in Barbie's world. (8) I wanted to be Barbie," Lopez said as she held up the new Barbie dolls in a recent interview. (9) Designer of the dolls, Robert Best, had high praise for J Lo’s career. (10) "She really worked his way to the top," said Best. (11) "I think she's gotten to where she is through hard work, and dedication, and she's really an incredible role model for young girls." (12) One little girl, will find it easy to look up to Lopez as a role model. (13) Jennifer’s own daughter, four-year-old Emme, is certain to get plenty of play time with the new designer Barbie dolls.

1 What change should be made in sentence 1?

• Change fan to Fan

• Add a comma after Lopez

• Change latest to lattest

• Change company to Company

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J LO Barbie

(1)If you are a fan of Jennifer Lopez you must have the latest doll from a popular toy manufacturing company. (2) Mattel Inc. has designed two contemporary Jennifer Lopez Barbie dolls. (3) The first barbie is a replica of Jennifer’s style from her Dance Again World Tour. (4) Barbie is dressed in a sequin covered full-length bodysuit. (5) The second Barbie figurine is a alluring red carpet doll that imitates Jennifer’s gorgeous gown at the 2012 Academy Awards. (6) Each of these fabulous dolls is available at BarbieCollector.com for $29.95. (7) "I wanted to live in Barbie's world. (8) I wanted to be Barbie," Lopez said as she held up the new Barbie dolls in a recent interview. (9) Designer of the dolls, Robert Best, had high praise for J Lo’s career. (10) "She really worked his way to the top," said Best. (11) "I think she's gotten to where she is through hard work, and dedication, and she's really an incredible role model for young girls." (12) One little girl, will find it easy to look up to Lopez as a role model. (13) Jennifer’s own daughter, four-year-old Emme, is certain to get plenty of play time with the new designer Barbie dolls.

2 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?

• Change barbie to Barbie

• Change Jennifer’s to Jennifers’

• Change Tour to tour

• No change should be made

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J LO Barbie

(1)If you are a fan of Jennifer Lopez you must have the latest doll from a popular toy manufacturing company. (2) Mattel Inc. has designed two contemporary Jennifer Lopez Barbie dolls. (3) The first barbie is a replica of Jennifer’s style from her Dance Again World Tour. (4) Barbie is dressed in a sequin covered full-length bodysuit. (5) The second Barbie figurine is a alluring red carpet doll that imitates Jennifer’s gorgeous gown at the 2012 Academy Awards. (6) Each of these fabulous dolls is available at BarbieCollector.com for $29.95. (7) "I wanted to live in Barbie's world. (8) I wanted to be Barbie," Lopez said as she held up the new Barbie dolls in a recent interview. (9) Designer of the dolls, Robert Best, had high praise for J Lo’s career. (10) "She really worked his way to the top," said Best. (11) "I think she's gotten to where she is through hard work, and dedication, and she's really an incredible role model for young girls." (12) One little girl, will find it easy to look up to Lopez as a role model. (13) Jennifer’s own daughter, four-year-old Emme, is certain to get plenty of play time with the new designer Barbie dolls.

3 How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Add a comma after figurine

• Change a to an

• Change gown to gowns

• Sentence 5 should not be changed

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(1)If you are a fan of Jennifer Lopez you must have the latest doll from a popular toy manufacturing company. (2) Mattel Inc. has designed two contemporary Jennifer Lopez Barbie dolls. (3) The first barbie is a replica of Jennifer’s style from her Dance Again World Tour. (4) Barbie is dressed in a sequin covered full-length bodysuit. (5) The second Barbie figurine is a alluring red carpet doll that imitates Jennifer’s gorgeous gown at the 2012 Academy Awards. (6) Each of these fabulous dolls is available at BarbieCollector.com for $29.95. (7) "I wanted to live in Barbie's world. (8) I wanted to be Barbie," Lopez said as she held up the new Barbie dolls in a recent interview. (9) Designer of the dolls, Robert Best, had high praise for J Lo’s career. (10) "She really worked his way to the top," said Best. (11) "I think she's gotten to where she is through hard work, and dedication, and she's really an incredible role model for young girls." (12) One little girl, will find it easy to look up to Lopez as a role model. (13) Jennifer’s own daughter, four-year-old Emme, is certain to get plenty of play time with the new designer Barbie dolls.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?

• Delete the quotation marks before She

• Change worked to work

• Change his way to her way

• No change needs to be made in sentence 10.

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(1)If you are a fan of Jennifer Lopez you must have the latest doll from a popular toy manufacturing company. (2) Mattel Inc. has designed two contemporary Jennifer Lopez Barbie dolls. (3) The first barbie is a replica of Jennifer’s style from her Dance Again World Tour. (4) Barbie is dressed in a sequin covered full-length bodysuit. (5) The second Barbie figurine is a alluring red carpet doll that imitates Jennifer’s gorgeous gown at the 2012 Academy Awards. (6) Each of these fabulous dolls is available at BarbieCollector.com for $29.95. (7) "I wanted to live in Barbie's world. (8) I wanted to be Barbie," Lopez said as she held up the new Barbie dolls in a recent interview. (9) Designer of the dolls, Robert Best, had high praise for J Lo’s career. (10) "She really worked his way to the top," said Best. (11) "I think she's gotten to where she is through hard work, and dedication, and she's really an incredible role model for young girls." (12) One little girl, will find it easy to look up to Lopez as a role model. (13) Jennifer’s own daughter, four-year-old Emme, is certain to get plenty of play time with the new designer Barbie dolls.

What change should be made in sentence 12?

• Delete the comma after girl

• Change Lopez to lopez

• Change role to roll

• Change model to modle

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(1) Rock climbing is a demanding sport, one that will test a climber's strength, persistence, alertness, and balance. (2) It is a risky sport and awareness of climbing techniques and the specialized equipment is critical for safety. (3) Rock climbing is a sport where individuals climb natural rock structures or man-made rock walls. (4) Rock climbing is not an adults-only sport. (5) Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens. (6) It is also a great way to learn other important life skills. (7) Climbing is a treacherous sport and is not a sport kids should try on their own. (8) Certain techniques are needed that can best be taught by good climbers. (9) The easiest way to get started is to find a rock climbing gym in your area and sign up for a class. (10) Once there you will learn the essentials and will meet more seasoned climbers that can coach you.

Kwan would like to add the following sentence to his paragraph.

The climber’s mental power can also be severely challenged.

Where is the BEST place to insert the sentence?

• After sentence 1

• After sentence 3

• After sentence 9

• This sentence should not be added to this paragraph

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(1) Rock climbing is a demanding sport, one that will test a climber's strength, persistence, alertness, and balance. (2) It is a risky sport and awareness of climbing techniques and the specialized equipment is critical for safety. (3) Rock climbing is a sport where individuals climb natural rock structures or man-made rock walls. (4) Rock climbing is not an adults-only sport. (5) Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens. (6) It is also a great way to learn other important life skills. (7) Climbing is a treacherous sport and is not a sport kids should try on their own. (8) Certain techniques are needed that can best be taught by good climbers. (9) The easiest way to get started is to find a rock climbing gym in your area and sign up for a class. (10) Once there you will learn the essentials and will meet more seasoned climbers that can coach you.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 5 and 6?

• Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens, but it’s an excellent way to learn other important life skills.

• Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens, and it’s an excellent way to learn other important life skills.

• Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens it’s an excellent way to learn other important life skills.

• Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens, nor is it an excellent way to learn other important life skills.

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(1) Rock climbing is a demanding sport, one that will test a climber's strength, persistence, alertness, and balance. (2) It is a risky sport and awareness of climbing techniques and the specialized equipment is critical for safety. (3) Rock climbing is a sport where individuals climb natural rock structures or man-made rock walls. (4) Rock climbing is not an adults-only sport. (5) Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens. (6) It is also a great way to learn other important life skills. (7) Climbing is a treacherous sport and is not a sport kids should try on their own. (8) Certain techniques are needed that can best be taught by good climbers. (9) The easiest way to get started is to find a rock climbing gym in your area and sign up for a class. (10) Once there you will learn the essentials and will meet more seasoned climbers that can coach you.

What transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 7?

• Afterwards

• Finally

• On the other hand

• When suddenly

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(1) Rock climbing is a demanding sport, one that will test a climber's strength, persistence, alertness, and balance. (2) It is a risky sport and awareness of climbing techniques and the specialized equipment is critical for safety. (3) Rock climbing is a sport where individuals climb natural rock structures or man-made rock walls. (4) Rock climbing is not an adults-only sport. (5) Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens. (6) It is also a great way to learn other important life skills. (7) Climbing is a treacherous sport and is not a sport kids should try on their own. (8) Certain techniques are needed that can best be taught by good climbers. (9) The easiest way to get started is to find a rock climbing gym in your area and sign up for a class. (10) Once there you will learn the essentials and will meet more seasoned climbers that can coach you.

Kwan wants to use a more accurate word than good in sentence 8. Which of the following words could BEST replace this word?

• huge

• dignified

• lingering

• qualified

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(1) Rock climbing is a demanding sport, one that will test a climber's strength, persistence, alertness, and balance. (2) It is a risky sport and awareness of climbing techniques and the specialized equipment is critical for safety. (3) Rock climbing is a sport where individuals climb natural rock structures or man-made rock walls. (4) Rock climbing is not an adults-only sport. (5) Climbing can be the perfect sport for kids and teens. (6) It is also a great way to learn other important life skills. (7) Climbing is a treacherous sport and is not a sport kids should try on their own. (8) Certain techniques are needed that can best be taught by good climbers. (9) The easiest way to get started is to find a rock climbing gym in your area and sign up for a class. (10) Once there you will learn the essentials and will meet more seasoned climbers that can coach you.

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 10?

• Once there, you will learn the essentials as you meet more seasoned climbers that can coach you.

• Once you are there. You will likely meet more seasoned climbers than you.

• You will learn the essentials and you will meet more seasoned climbers like you that can coach you.

• You will learn the essentials and meet more people that you can coach once you are there.

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