Revising/Editing

"The astronauts were surrounded by stars on their left, on their right, and over their heads, floating outside the spaceship."

What is the most effective way to revise the sentence?

• A. Astronauts were surrounded by stars floating outside the spaceship on their left, on their right, and over their heads.

• B. Floating outside the spaceship, astronauts were surrounded by stars on their left, on their right, and over their heads.

• C. On their left, on their right, and over their heads, stars are surrounded by astronauts floating through the spaceship.

• D. The sentence should not be changed.

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

"He woke up the next morning, considering he might need to go to the doctor."

What is the most effective way to revise the sentence?

• A. Waking up in the next morning, he goes to the doctor after considering.

• B. When he wake up the next morning, he considered going to the doctor.

• C. When he woke up the next morning, he considered he might need to go to the doctor.

• D. Considering going to the doctor, he woke up the next morning.

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Arnold ordered a sandwich from Subway. He forgot to ask for extra mayonnaise.

What is the most effective way to revise the sentence?

• A. Arnold ordered a sandwich from Subway, he forgot to ask for extra mayonnaise.

• B. Arnold ordered a sandwich from Subway: he forgot to ask for extra mayonnaise.

• C. Arnold ordered a sandwich, but he forgot to ask for extra mayonnaise.

• D. Arnold ordered a sandwich; but he forgot to ask for extra mayonnaise.

Tags

CCSS.L.9-10.2A

"After taking off, the pilot reached maximum altitude. Then he placed the plane on autopilot."

Which is the most effective way to revise the sentence?

• A. After taking off, the pilot reached maximum altitude, where he placed the plane on autopilot.

• B. After taking off, the pilot reached maximum altitude, then he went to place the plane on autopilot.

• C. After taking off where he placed the plane on autopilot. the pilot took off.

• D. After taking off and after the pilot reached maximum altitude, and then he placed the plane on autopilot.

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C