Assignment 5.5 - Revise & Edit

(1) We should try to keep our parks clean and free of trash. (2) This shows that we want to take care of our natural resources. (3) To remind people, we post rules about how to take care of our parks.

Which sentence could best follow sentence 3?

• A. Knowing the rules will help people keep our parks clean.

• B. Going to the parks on weekends can be fun for everyone.

• C. Many people use the parks every weekend.

(1) The Titanic was the largest and most elegant passenger ship in 1912. (2) It ran into an iceberg in the north Atlantic Ocean. (3) It sank within three hours.

What is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• It ran into an iceberg in the north Atlantic Ocean, it sank within three hours.

• It ran into an iceberg in the north Atlantic Ocean. it sank within three hours

• It ran into an iceberg in the north Atlantic Ocean and sank within three hours.

(1) There were once thousands of peregrine falcons in the eastern United States. (2) People were using harmful pesticides. (3) Some pesticides are very useful. (4) Eventually, people stopped using harmful pesticides to help the falcons.

Which sentence, if any, does not belong in the paragraph?

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 3

• Sentence4

(1) Disney World was opened in 1960 in Florida. (2) It began with the Magic Kingdom and to add Epcot Center later. (3) The Hollywood Studios attraction was also added.

Which is the best way to revise Sentence 2?

• A. It began with the Magic Kingdom. And to add Epcot Center was later.

• B. It began with the Magic Kingdom, and later to add Epcot Center.

• C. It began with the Magic Kingdom and added Epcot Center later.

(1) Polar bears are the largest predator in the world. (2) When it stands on its hind legs. (3) It is two times taller than an adult human. (4) Adult male polar bears usually weigh around 1,000 pounds.

What is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• A. When it stands on its hind legs, it is two times taller than an adult human.

• B. When it stands on its hind legs, two times taller than an adult human.

• C. Standing on its hind legs, when it is two 6 times taller than an adult human.

(1) You can recycle your old crayons into chunky crayons. (2) Remove the paper from the crayons. (3) Break up the crayons then drop them into muffin tins. (4) Pop them in the oven to melt.

What is the best way to revise sentence 3?

• A. Break up the crayons and drop them into muffin tins.

• B. Break up the crayons. And drop them into muffin tins.

• C. Break up the crayons into muffin tins.

(1) Polar bear cubs live with their mothers for three years. (2) When it is grown, the polar bear lives alone. (3) Most bears hibernate in the winter. (4) The adult polar bear spends most of its life hunting for food.

Which sentence does not belong in the paragraph?

• Sentence (1)

• Sentence (2)

• Sentence (3)

• Sentence (4)

(1) Erosion is the process of earth being broken into small pieces by wind or water. (2) Large boulders can become sand. (3) Mountains can become hills.

Which is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• A. Large boulders can become sand and mountains can becomes hills.

• B. Large boulders can become sand, and mountains can become hills.

• C. Large boulders can become sand, then mountains can become hills.

1) Many dogs are used as work animals. (2) German Shepherds are used in police work. (3) Retrievers are used as service dogs. (4) Dogs can be great helpers to their owners.

Which is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• A. German Shepherds are used in police work then Retrievers are used as service dogs.

• B. German Shepherds are used in police work because Retrievers are used as service dogs.

• C. German Shepherds are used in police work, and Retrievers are used as service dogs.

1) Pong was one of the first video games ever created. (2) It was developed by the Atari Company as a training device. (3) A white dot represented a tennis ball that was hit back and forth across the line.

The following sentence could best be added after which sentence?

The device had a black screen with a white line down the center.

• After sentence (1)

• After sentence (2)

• After sentence (3)