A Thanksgiving Scare: Revising Practice

Matthew wants sentence 1 to show that Robert doesn’t want to take a summer course. What is the most effective replacement for decided to sign up for?

• longed to take

• was asked to register for

• considered taking

• dreaded the thought of sitting through

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CCSS.L.9-10.5

CCSS.RL.9-10.4

In the second paragraph (sentences 5–9), what is the most effective way to increase the story’s level of suspense?

• Move sentence 6 so that it follows sentence 8

• Replace sentence 9 with a detailed description of the cut and of the danger

• Build in descriptive details that tell the reader more about Robert’s uncle

• Insert a flashback to Robert’s class on the day that he learns how to treat dangerous cuts

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CCSS.RL.9-10.5

In sentence 10, Matthew wants readers to recognize that Robert’s uncle is acting brave but is frightened. What is the most effective replacement for his uncle asked?

• his uncle sobbed, his voice shaking

• his uncle shrugged, his voice trembling

• his uncle glared, his voice quiet and calming

• his uncle grinned, his voice loud and comforting

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CCSS.L.9-10.5

CCSS.RL.9-10.4

Which of the following sentences uses figurative language to create a more vivid description of the cut in sentence 13?

• Blood ran down his arm and started to splash in the sink.

• Although the sink’s water was cold, his arm wouldn’t stop bleeding.

• As if a pipeline had burst in his arm, blood just kept pouring into the sink.

• The bright red liquid mixed with water from the sink, looking pink as it ran into the drain.

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CCSS.L.9-10.5

CCSS.RL.9-10.4

CCSS.W.9-10.3D

Sentence 21 begins, “They drove to the hospital . . .” Matthew would like to use a more vivid verb to describe their trip. Which of the following is the most effective replacement for drove?

• raced

• went

• headed

• traveled

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CCSS.L.9-10.5

CCSS.RL.9-10.4

CCSS.W.9-10.2D

CCSS.W.9-10.3D

Matthew’s audience might not understand what the doctor means when he says “Nice job” in sentence 23. Which of the following sentences would be most effective following sentence 23?

• “The cut’s not too bad,” he said.

• He smiled at them and nodded.

• “You two treated the cut exactly as you should have.”

• The doctor meant that they had done the right thing.

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CCSS.L.9-10.4

CCSS.L.9-10.5

CCSS.RL.9-10.4