A Thanksgiving Scare: Revising Practice

Matthew wants sentence 1 to show that Robert doesn’t want to take a summer course. What is the most effective replacement for decided to sign up for?

• longed to take

• was asked to register for

• considered taking

• dreaded the thought of sitting through

Tags

CCSS.RI. 9-10.1

CCSS.RI.11-12.1

CCSS.RI.8.1

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

In the second paragraph (sentences 5–9), what is the most effective way to increase the story’s level of suspense?

• Move sentence 6 so that it follows sentence 8

• Replace sentence 9 with a detailed description of the cut and of the danger

• Build in descriptive details that tell the reader more about Robert’s uncle

• Insert a flashback to Robert’s class on the day that he learns how to treat dangerous cuts

Tags

CCSS.RL.2.10

CCSS.RL.2.2

CCSS.RL.2.3

CCSS.RL.4.3

CCSS.RL.4.4

In sentence 10, Matthew wants readers to recognize that Robert’s uncle is acting brave but is frightened. What is the most effective replacement for his uncle asked?

• his uncle sobbed, his voice shaking

• his uncle shrugged, his voice trembling

• his uncle glared, his voice quiet and calming

• his uncle grinned, his voice loud and comforting

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.11-12.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

Which of the following sentences uses figurative language to create a more vivid description of the cut in sentence 13?

• Blood ran down his arm and started to splash in the sink.

• Although the sink’s water was cold, his arm wouldn’t stop bleeding.

• As if a pipeline had burst in his arm, blood just kept pouring into the sink.

• The bright red liquid mixed with water from the sink, looking pink as it ran into the drain.

Tags

CCSS.RI.9-10.4

CCSS.RI.9-10.4

CCSS.RL.11-12.4

CCSS.RL.8.4

CCSS.RL.9-10.4

Sentence 21 begins, “They drove to the hospital . . .” Matthew would like to use a more vivid verb to describe their trip. Which of the following is the most effective replacement for drove?

• raced

• went

• headed

• traveled

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.11-12.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

Matthew’s audience might not understand what the doctor means when he says “Nice job” in sentence 23. Which of the following sentences would be most effective following sentence 23?

• “The cut’s not too bad,” he said.

• He smiled at them and nodded.

• “You two treated the cut exactly as you should have.”

• The doctor meant that they had done the right thing.

Tags

CCSS.RI. 9-10.1

CCSS.RI.11-12.1

CCSS.RI.8.1

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2