"Mama Dog" - Revise and Edit Practice

1. What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• A The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, this is a shelter for homeless animals.

• B The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary and a shelter for homeless animals.

• C The officers, who took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, had a shelter for homeless animals.

• D The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, a shelter for homeless animals.

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

2. Joe did not maintain a consistent point of view in the first paragraph of this paper. What revision should he make in sentence 5 to correct this problem?

• F Change she arrived to the dog arrived

• G Change you to humans

• H Change no one to they

• J Change she would become to it would become

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CCSS.RL.1.6

CCSS.RL.5.6

CCSS.RL.6.6

CCSS.RL.7.6

CCSS.RL.8.6

3. Joe wants to provide a better closing for the second paragraph (sentences 6-10). Which of these could be added after sentence 10 to more effectively close this paragraph?

• A People thought Jasmine was a very strange and unique dog.

• B The staff was afraid that Jasmine might accidentally harm the puppies.

• C She took care of them as if she had given birth to them herself.

• D At that moment the workers at the shelter knew that Jasmine was special.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

4. Joe would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 14?

• F According to the staff, once Jasmine and the fawn met, they were inseparable.

• G Clearly, the fawn was just a little baby at 11 weeks old.

• H Jasmine preferred to take care of animals that were similar to her.

• J Bunnies, badgers, guinea pigs, birds, and fawns - Jasmine cared for a strange mix of animals.

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.7.1

CCSS.RL.8.1

5. What is the BEST way to revise sentence 15?

• A The animals at the sanctuary were comforted when Jasmine's loving presence and gentle care comforted them.

• B The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine's loving presence and gentle care.

• C The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, who had her loving presence and gentle care.

• D The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, her loving presence, and her gentle care.

Tags

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5