Revising and Editing 4/13

What transition would be the most appropriate to use at the beginning of sentence 6?

• As a matter of concern

• For further evidence

• To wipe away any doubt

• For this reason among others

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

Candice needs a more effective thesis statement for her paper. Which sentence should replace sentence 8 to serve as the thesis statement?

• There are other barrier reefs in the oceans of the world, but only the Great Barrier Reef is so well known.

• The Great Barrier Reef of Australia is a supreme example of the mysteries of the natural world because of its wide variety of plants and animal life.

• Some scientists believe the Great Barrier Reef first began to grow about 18 million years ago.

• A coral reef like the Great Barrier Reef can grow only in shallow, warm water because it needs light from the sun to survive.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Candice needs a topic sentence for the third paragraph (sentences 19-21). Which of the following sentences should be inserted before sentence 19 to introduce the ideas in this paragraph?

• Over time a vast array of creatures has come to inhabit the Great Barrier Reef.

• Marine animal species that are threatened are protected by the Great Barrier Reef Marine Park Authority.

• The biodiversity of the Great Barrier Reef ensures its long-term existence.

• The waters along the Great Barrier Reef provide a habitat for marine animals that researchers study.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Candice may have a redundant sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22-26). Which sentence, if any, should be deleted?

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

• Sentence 26

• No sentence should be deleted

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CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

Candice would like to improve her concluding sentence by summing up the ideas she has presented. Which sentence should she use to replace sentence 35?

• Finally, we must protect the Great Barrier Reef from being destroyed so future generations can enjoy it.

• How much still remains to be discovered about the Great Barrier Reef of Australia is anybody's guess.

• Researchers should explore the oceans further to try to find other natural wonders like the Great Barrier Reef.

• Attracting visitors from around the world, the Great Barrier Reef has a beauty that is perhaps unequaled anywhere on Earth.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?

• Change benefitial to beneficial

• Insert a comma after people

• Change healthier to healthiest

• No change is needed in sentence 4

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CCSS.L.3.1G

What is the correct way to write sentence 9?

• People feel safe when confiding in their pets; without being judgemental. A pet will often sit compassionately by its owner's side for as long as is needed.

• People feel safe when confiding in their pets, without being judgmental; a pet will often sit compassionately by its owner's side for as long as is needed.

• People feel safe when confiding in their pets. Without being judgmental, a pet will often sit compassionately; by its owner's side, for as long as is needed.

• People feel safe when confiding in their pets; without being judgmental, a pet will often sit compassionately by its owner's side for as long as is needed.

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 26?

• Change minimal to minamal

• Change are to were

• Delete the comma after appropriate

• No change is necessary.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should be made in sentence 30?

• Change poet to Poet

• Change until to Until

• Change one's to ones'

• Change remains to remained

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CCSS.L.1.2A

CCSS.L.2.2A

CCSS.L.3.2A

CCSS.L.4.2A

CCSS.L.K.2A