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(1) Young George Nissen was at the circus when an idea popped into his head. (2) George was a gymnast and had come to see the trapeze artists. (3) At the end of the act, the acrobats let go of the swing and dropped into a safety net. (4) It sent them bouncing high into the air. (5) Nissen thought it would be great for practicing gymnastics. (6) It looked like fun, too!

The meaning of sentence 5 is unclear. Sebastian can improve this sentence by changing it to —

• the swing

• the air

• the trapeze artist

• the net

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D

(7 ) George was not just a daydreamer. (8) At age 16, he put together a rectangular frame made of steel from a junkyard. (9) Then he stretched a piece of canvas over it. (10) He f ixed the canvas to the frame with strips cut from old rubber inner tubes. (11) He took his invention to a camp where he worked as a counselor. (12) The kids loved bouncing on it!

Sebastian wants to use a more accurate word than fixed in sentence 10. Which of the following could BEST replace this word

• touched

• fastened

• folded

• twisted

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.K.1B

(22) ''Sorry, Jamie," called Logan. (23) “We didn't think throwing a couple of rocks in the water would scare you so much!" (24) Jamie felt relieved as a embarrassed grin crossed his face.

What change should be made in sentence 24?

• Change felt to feeled

• Change relieved to relieving

• Change a to an

• Change crossed to crossing

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.K.1B

(20) Jamie’s nervously eyes scanned the shoreline to see how far it was to safety. (21) That's when he saw his two brothers laughing so hard they could hardly stand up.

How should sentence 20 be changed?

• Change nervously to nervous

• Change scanned to scanning

• Change see to sea

• Change safety to safely

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

(17) Where was it? (18) He was afraid to put a oar into the dark, cloudy water. (19) The creature might grab it and pull him under water!

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 18?

• Change afraid to afraidly

• Change a to an

• Change the to their

• Sentence 17 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

(4) Jamie stretched out and rested his head on a seat. (5) He propped up his fishing pole next to him. (6) He fell asleep waiting for an fish to bite.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?

• Change He to They

• Change fell to fall

• Change a to an

• Make no change

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CCSS.L.3.1D

CCSS.L.4.1B

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

(14) The sled was going so fast that it was hard to steer. (15) Then CRASH! (16) We ran into a bush! (17) Amy went flying, and I got my feet caught in the bush.

Look at sentence 16. The word ran does not express what Andrea was trying to say. Which word could BEST replace ran and help Andrea improve the meaning of this sentence?

• eased

• glided

• slammed

• shoved

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.K.1B

(11) Then, we decided to go down the hill together. (12) Amy sat in the front, and I sat in the back. (13) We pushed off together and started to go down the hill. (14) The sled was going so fast that it was hard to steer. (15) Then CRASH! (16) We ran into a bush!

Andrea wants to use a more accurate word than go in sentence 13. Which of the following could BEST replace this word?

• creep

• walk

• run

• zoom

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.K.1B

(7) At first, we rode our sleds downhill at the same time. (8) We put them next to each other at the top of the hill. (9) We pushed off. (10) Sometimes Amy reached the bottom first , and other times I did.

Look at sentence 8. The word put does not express what Andrea was trying to say. Which word could BEST replace put and help Andrea improve the meaning of this sentence?

• held

• placed

• skidded

• threw

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.K.1B

(5) “I’ll finish them later,” said James. (6) He put the french frys on top of the basket next to the Cheese Puffs. (7) Then he wiped his fingers clean.

What change needs to be made in sentence 6?

• Change frys to fries

• Change basket to baskets

• Change Puffs to Puffes

• Sentence 6 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.2.1B

CCSS.L.3.1B

CCSS.L.K.1C