Wordiness and redundancy

_______________unfortunately, the spans occasionally suffer abrupt structural failure and collapse.

• The safety of bridges, keeping them from becoming dangerous, is overseen by government departments, but

• Government departments oversee bridge safety, but

• Bridge safety, being overseen by government departments, is crucial, but

• The safety of bridges is being overseen by government departments, but

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CCSS.L.3.1E

CCSS.L.4.1B

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

_______________________has always been among my favorite articles of clothing.

• This fine wool sweater was once being knitted by my grandmother, and it

• My grandmother knitted this fine wool sweater, and it

• This fine wool sweater was knitted by my grandmother, and she

• This fine wool sweater was knitted and made by my grandmother, and it

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.8.1B

CCSS.L.8.1D

CCSS.L.8.3A

There was an immediate and ________________

• massive and tremendous public outcry against the dictator's proclamation.

• massive public outcry and popular complaint against the dictator's proclamation.

• ferocious public outcry against the dictator's proclamation.

• tremendous public outcry against the dictator's proclamation when he declared it.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

_______________________cleared up any misconceptions about the nature of space travel.

• The teacher taught a lesson that

• Being taught by the teacher, a lesson

• A lesson was taught by the teacher that

• The teacher taught and instructed the class in a lesson that

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Although_________________ wear off quickly.

• the first initial success can be rewarding, the feeling of satisfaction can

• initial success can be rewarding, the feeling of satisfaction can rapidly

• initial success can be rewarding, the feeling of satisfaction can

• initial success can be rewarding, the feeling of satisfaction can promptly

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1G