Revising & Editing Warm-up 1/20-1/21

Paragraph 2 (sentences 6-9) needs a transition to help promote the logical progression of ideas. Which transition is needed at the beginning of sentence 7?

• For example,

• Nevertheless,

• On the other hand,

• However,

Clayton would like to add better diction and description. Which of the following sentence would best replace sentence 9 to accomplish this task?

• Many visitors who attend the festival watch as the cockroaches race across the ground.

• Thousands of spectators stand and observe as the big brown insects scurry across the ground.

• The race includes many insects racing across the groups and observed by spectators.

• Scurrying across the ground, thousands of spectators observe the brown insects race.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

1. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

• Change failed to fail

• Change notice to notise

• Change then to than

• Make no change

Tags

CCSS.L.4.1C

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

2. What change needs to be made to sentence 5?

• Change saw to seen

• Change hearing to heard

• Insert a comma after music

• No change is needed

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1B

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

3. What correction needs to be made to sentence 7?

• Change who to he

• Change borring to boring

• Change fun to funner

• No change is needed

Tags

CCSS.L.3.1G

4. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?

• Change suggested to sugested

• Change he to they

• Change enjoyment to enjoyable

• Make no change

Tags

CCSS.L.3.2C

CCSS.L.4.2B

CCSS.L.6.3A