Benchmark Revising and Editing Practice

Revising Question 1: Arjun needs to establish the thesis of his paper. Which sentence should be added after sentence 4 to create an effective thesis statement?

• James and Gastelum could not have imagined what a remarkable place the garden would one day become.

• James’s home country of England did not offer the kind of climate that orchids need in order to grow outdoors.

• Orchids come in all colors and sizes and are beloved by gardeners all over the world, even though they take some effort to grow.

• Flowers would replace coffee as the crop grown on this large plantation.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

Revising Question 2: Arjun wants to strengthen the transition between the second paragraph (sentences 5–6) and the third paragraph (sentences 7–13). Which sentence should replace sentence 7 to provide a better transition?

• Additionally, the orchid garden of Las Pozas was a failure.

• But what would happen to the orchid garden of Las Pozas?

• Sadly, the orchid garden of Las Pozas was not destined to last.

• The orchid garden of Las Pozas drew a lot of attention.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

Revising Question 3: How should sentence 13 be revised?

• Confronted with the loss of his beloved orchids, to build a surrealist sculpture garden was what James decided to do.

• Confronted with the loss of his beloved orchids, James decided to build a surrealist sculpture garden.

• Confronted with the loss of his beloved orchids, a surrealist sculpture garden was built by James.

• Confronted with the loss of his beloved orchids, building a surrealist sculpture garden was James’s decision.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Revising Question 4: Arjun wants to add this sentence to his fifth paragraph (sentences 21–25).

"Unfortunately there was not enough revenue from tourism to finance the constant maintenance that the site required."

Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 21

• After sentence 22

• After sentence 23

• After sentence 24

Editing Question 1: What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 3?

• Delete the comma after generation

• Change is using to are using

• Change too frequently to to frequently

• No change should be made in sentence 3.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

Editing Question 2: What is the correct way to write sentence 9?

• He said it was faster than trying to decode my texts, but I didn’t understand what he meant until a few days later.

• He said it was faster than trying to decode my texts: I didn’t understand what he meant until a few days later.

• He said it was faster than trying to decode my texts. Which I didn’t understand what he meant until a few days later.

•  He said it was faster than trying to decode my texts, and I didn’t understand. What he meant until a few days later.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

Editing Question 3: What correction should be made in sentence 14?

• Change My to Our

• Change covered to covers

• Delete the comma after page

• Change they to it

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

Editing Question 4: What change should Noah make in sentence 24?

• Insert a colon after questioning

• Change different to diffrent

• Insert a comma after conversation

• Change correspondense to correspondence

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

Editing Question 5: What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 29?

• Insert a comma after important

• Change is hurting to are hurting

• Change our to their

• No change should be made in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D