Writing MC: Maintain Formal Style/Tone/Word Choice/Audience

Which TWO changes might help Joseph maintain a more formal style in his letter?

• Change "epidemic" to "sickness"

• change "repeat" to "second"

• Change "Sure" to "Of course"

• change "okay with" to "accepting"

• change "felt" to "thought"

Which corrections should be made to the sentences to maintain a formal style?

• Eliminate the use of second person pronouns.

• Eliminate the metaphors.

• Combine sentences.

• Change "a lot of" to "numerous"

Which sentence could be added in order to maintain a formal style?

• Dealing with conflict is a life-long skill that will be developed from participating in this anti-bullying program.

• With every cloud there is a silver lining; the silver lining being the anti-bullying program.

• Don't let bullying get you down; pick yourself up by your bootstraps and move on with your life.

• Tackling the bullying issue head on is not for sissies.

• A squabble is like a deck of cards, easy to deal with.

How can this sentence be revised for improved word choice?

• change "kid's got to chill" to "student has to kick it"

• change "kid's got to chill" to "kid needs to stay"

• change "kid's got to chill" to "student must stay"

• change "kid's got to chill" to "kid's got to get extra help"

Which sentence has been best revised for an appropriate tone?

• It is clear that this is totally unfair.

• Consequently, we start each race at a disadvantage.

• So how do you think that helps us win any races?

• Walking so fast also tires us out.

How can this sentence best be revised for appropriate tone?

• Freeing her brother from prison was totally the reason for her life.

• She felt that freeing her brother from prison was definitely the important scheme of her life.

• So freeing her brother from prison was the big finale of her life.

• She believed that freeing her brother from prison was the main purpose of her life.

What is the best way to rewrite the underlined part of the sentence to improve word choice?

• Though I crave the sport

• Though I enjoy the sport

• Though I hate the sport

• Though I think the sport is fun