Edit and Revise Practice

The New American Dream

What change, if any should be made in sentence 1

• Change popular to populaer

• change they to their children

• add a comma after popular

• no change is needed

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

The New American Dream What change, is any should be made in sentence 2

• change year to years

• add a comma after old

• change 26 years old to 26-year-old

• No change is needed?

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CCSS.L.11-12.2A

The New American Dream

What is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• Tyler Belvins, a 26-year-old from Illinois, has done just that by becoming a streamer on the video platform Twitch.

• Tyler Belvins, a 26-year-old from Illinois, he has done just that be becoming a streamer on the video platform Twitch.

• Twitch is a video platform where Tyler Belvins from Illinois who is a 26 year-old is streamer.

• A 26-year-old from Illinois is a streamer on the video platform Twitch his name is Tyler Belvins.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

The New American Dream

What is the BEST revision to make in Sentence 5?

• You may know him better by the username Ninja, the owner of Twitch's most- followed channel with over 4 million subscribers.

• You may know him better by the username Ninja: he is the owner of Twitch's most-followed channel with over 4 million subscribers.

• The owner of Twitch's most - followed channel has over 4 million subscribers, and has the username of Ninja.

• No revision needed

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CCSS.L.9-10.2B

The New American Dream

What change, if any should be made in sentence 6?

• Delete the comma after donations

• change reveunue to revenue

• change who to whom

• No change is needed

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A