1st 9 Weeks Revision and Editing Review

What change should be made in sentence 2?

• Change week to weak

• Insert a comma after school

• Change could not to cannot

• Change for to on

What change should be made in sentence 3?

• Change Town to town

• Change Pat's to Pats

• Change hour to our

• Change were to are

What change should be made in sentence 7?

• Change were to will be

• Change their to there

• Change day to days

• Change in to before

The word move is not the best word to use in sentence 7.  Which word should replace move in this sentence?

• wriggle

• tickle

• step

• walk

Darla left out the following sentence from the fifth paragraph (sentences 15-16). 

• After sentence 14

• After sentence 15

• After sentence 16

What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 17 and 18?

• We spread out our blankets, towels, umbrellas, and all the other things that people take to the beach.

• We spread out our blankets and towels and then we spread out our umbrellas and everything else.

• We spread out our blankets and towels, and then we spread out our umbrellas and all the other things people take to the beach.

• We spread out our blankets and towels, so we can take all the other things to the beach.

What change should be made in sentence 3?

• Delete the comma after yard

• Change climb to climbs

• Change Because to When

• Change stand to standed

What is the correct way to write sentence 9?

• We look up through the gold canopy of majestic old trees so I wistfully recall

                  the carefree hours I spent daydreaming high in their branches.

   

• We look up through the gold canopy of majestic old trees, and I wistfully recall      the carefree hours I spent daydreaming high in their branches.

• We look up through the gold canopy of majestic old trees I wistfully recall the

                   carefree hours I spent daydreaming high in their branches.

   

• We look up through the gold canopy of majestic old trees because I wistfully

                  recall the carefree hours I spent daydreaming high in their branches.

   

What change should be made in sentence 10?

• Change sold to soled

• Delete the comma after whisper

• Change here to hear

• Change belong to belongs

Brianna needs a better transition at the beginning of sentence 2.  Which transition should replace First?

• Therefore

• Instead

• For example

• Yet